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Swimming

Chorus
My heart was weak to fall
For the smile on your face
And the strength beneath your arms
Holding me in place

But my eyes were strong to see
Inside your heart's disgrace
And now I wish I could believe
The smile on your face

Verse
Your smile had sent me swimming
Swimming in the ocean
But the water rippled in the cold
The murky depths of your devotion

My blood was set afire
Licking through my veins
Stinging in each step I took
Closer to your flames

I was swimming, swimming fast
My muscles frozen in the cold
I forgot the pain when I started to sink
The flames were growing old

You didn't smile anymore
No words escaped your lips
And suddenly the flames were gone
Out to sea like ships

Chorus
My heart was weak to fall
For the smile on your face
And the strength beneath your arms
Holding me in place

But my eyes were strong to see
Inside your heart's disgrace
And now I wish I could believe
The smile on your face

Verse
You saw my hesitation
As I began to see the light
I found the end of the tunnel ahead
Yet nothing was quite right

Without you I felt nothing
I was numb from my deep swim
Freezing winds shook my resolve
I had nothing more to win

Back again, towards the flame
The warmth burned through my skin
But I pulled back, breaking free
Free of that cold swim

Chorus
My heart was weak to fall
For the smile on your face
And the strength beneath your arms
Holding me in place

But my eyes were strong to see
Inside your heart's disgrace
And now I wish I could believe
The smile on your face

Verse
I was swimming, swimming hard
But the water filled my lungs
Drowning in the ocean
To the water I succumb

I was swimming, until I sunk
Until I found the distant shore
I was swimming until I stopped
And now I swim no more




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Shadowlight said...
today at 5:38 pm:
Very beautiful imagery
 
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Readqueenz7 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 18, 2011 at 11:10 pm:
Beautiful imagery. Really great work.
 
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shadowriderThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 18, 2011 at 9:32 pm:
This was great! The flow was gorgeous and I love how you changed each verse but kept a central theme. Wonderful!
 
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paige14This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 18, 2011 at 7:53 pm:
This is fantastic! I could hear the song and the rhythm from line one. Even though it's pretty much all figurative language, I easily understood the story. It's just wonderful!
 
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thetruthawaits94This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 18, 2011 at 7:18 pm:
This is wonderful work!!! keep writing! i could really hear the music, but besides that this is really great poetry as well! Great job! :)
 
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NinjaGirl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 21, 2011 at 6:41 pm:
By the way, I though I'd mention that the parts about flames reminded me of Rolling in the Deep :P
 
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NinjaGirl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 21, 2011 at 6:38 pm:
I had music playing while reading this but I completely tuned it out so I could sing your song in my head! Great job!
 
xelawriter97This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jul. 21, 2011 at 8:01 pm :
Thanks!!! :-)
 
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CarrieAnn13This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 20, 2011 at 8:49 pm:
This is a gorgeous song!  I actually began to sing it aloud as I was reading it, despite not being able to carry a tune in a bucket. ;)  This gave me shivers (in a good way) and I love how you developed the metaphor of swimming.  Amazing job!  I'm favouriting this.
 
xelawriter97This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jul. 21, 2011 at 3:26 am :
Aww thank you sooo much!
 
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Bushra G. said...
Jul. 20, 2011 at 8:34 pm:
Everything was so well-versed, with great organization. I loved how you brought upon the concept, and described it so well.
 
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PaRaNoRmAl627This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 20, 2011 at 2:14 pm:
you have soooo much talent :) garnet77 essentially took everything i wouldve said lol but you did a great job with thiss
 
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Garnet77 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 2, 2011 at 7:23 pm:
This is amazing!!! I'd love to actually hear it as a song. Your rhythm was great, and I started to get the beat of the song as I read. I really love this. :)
 
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