Autumn Leaf

Well, normally I hate poems that rhyme, but this one was great, because the rhyming wasn't forced. It felt natural, like it was just part of the poem, which is great.  I just loved the imagery you used, and the way you played with the words.

You asked me in a comment in my article 'Palpitate' to read some of your writing, and ummm...... I have to admitt you must be crazy because my article wasn't half as good as this poem!

 I loved the descpritions! 'Brown and orange with faint whispers of green' that had to be my favorite line in the poem out of all of them, because right when it started you grabbed the reader's attention.

 The only thing i would say that bugged me was that the author's comment was longer... (more »)

hey! can i just say this was fantastic! you are a very good writer and i can tell you have alot of passion injected into this. you are very alternating in your descriptions and i like it! please check out some of my work, im not logged in atm but...yeah!

This was Awesome! wow, how do you write! iT WAs short, but was amazingg! I love you write so much, but I no have good wnglish to write any thing or any one help me. But I think this good work, how you say? Bravo, bella!

KEEP WRITING. THIS IS ABSOLUTELY MAG-NIFICENT! I THINK YOU ARE VERY GOOD, I LOVE THE COLOURS YOU DESCRIBED. PLEASE DO KEEP WRITING, YOU HAVE GOT REAL WORDS. X

Hun, I believe you have a career in the making, with this poem. I do think that you shouldn't have made the amber and maroon line quite so bumpy, but it'll do. The rest is quite the masterpiece! I think that this is mag-worthy! I don't get why there is some absolute rubbish going in there, all based on votes. But I think this is a fine example of verbal art! Please keep writing, I rate this 10 out of 5! :-)

AAAAAAAH! I LOVE FALL, my absolute fav season!!!! I cant believe how beautiful your flow is! This is a piece of golD poetry, i reckon :) HOLY COW! its FANTABULOUS :))

All I can say is: Beautiful! You have got an awesome way with words and I encourage you to keep writing. I can't believe you're only 13, honestly! I am a young adult and I am very thankful that this kind of talent is still alive in the modern age!

You have very real talent and this was awesome! Beautiful work, please keep writing more like these. I love to read poems with as much feeling and heart invoked as this. This was very touching and playful, as well, in a bubbly kind of way. This has shown us that our world still has young talent! By the way, how old are you? This is great!

Love this. You captured it all perfectly with the flowing ease of a poem. I love how each color has its own personality and it's very flowing. I just read this aloud to my ma and she said it was a true showcase of beautiful imagery and talent. Girl, keep writing. Rated this cause it's amazing. This should defs be in the MAG, don't you reckon, guys? HAHA! xoxoxo

This is great! I am absolutely horrible at writing poetry, so I really wish I could write like you! I love the flow and rhythm of your work. The imagery was excellent too. Wonderful job! I can't wait to read more of your work!

I liked this poem. the description and personification of the colors was beautiful. My one piece of advice would be not to sacrifice the flow. The line about Maroon and Amber doesnt quite fit your rhythm and it threw me off a little bit. I think if you could fix that a bit it would be absoultely stunning.

I really enjoyed the rythmn you had to the piece.....it was easy to read and added meaning to the words.....and you also did an awesome job with imagary and word choice :) keep it up and I look forwords to seeing more from you!

This was beautifully written. The grammar and writing was excellent. It ties together to show great imagery with the colors and the falling leaf. Keep writing

Really pretty. I love those leaves that are just a ton of different colors

Amazing, your poem is. Great job and keep writing.

I love fall time. The colors remind me to just live. This is really good work.