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Take my Heart and Break It

October 11, 2009
By jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
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&quot;Don&#039;t gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold.&quot; <br /> <br /> &quot;You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer.&quot;

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Take my broken heart,
and rip it from my chest.
Steal away my soul,
and finally put me to rest.

I dreamt about you day and night,
and I wanted you to be mine.
You watched me in my hardest days,
and sometimes you watched me shine.

Every time I saw you,
my heart would skip a beat.
Every time you said my name,
I would spring out of my seat.

I loved you with my heart and soul.
I loved you year after year.
But something always kept us apart:
our confusion, our chances, our fear.

But now there is no hope for us,
we are doomed to be apart.
Maybe I won't feel the pain
if you completely break my heart.

© Hilary R., Woodland Hills, CA

The author's comments:
Most of the time relationships grow from the innocence of a best friend. This is my poem explaining how it feels to realize that. This is also to express the awful truth when you discover that you can never be together.
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celloizmylife PLATINUM said...
on May. 15 2010 at 9:32 am
celloizmylife PLATINUM, Atlanta, Georgia
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Around here, however, we don&#039;t look backwards for very long.<br /> We keep moving forward, opening up new doors and doing new things, because we&#039;re curious.....And curiosity keeps leading us down new paths.<br /> -Walt Disney

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oh my goodness, I loved it! my favorite line was definitely the last.
MeXiCaNsHoRtY BRONZE said...
on May. 14 2010 at 11:13 am
MeXiCaNsHoRtY BRONZE, East Chicago, Indiana
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Wow, this is amazing i can really relate to this. i acually a little tear..keep up the good work and keep your head up high never look down!
VampiericRain GOLD said...
on May. 12 2010 at 3:51 pm
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Oh my gosh. This is so sad and...and...amazing. I nearly cried when I read it. Im going through the same thing (sorta) and it really stinks. :( I love it. Five stars! :) I would really appreciate it if you would read and rate some of my writings? That would be amazing if you did. :) Thank you!
jennee21_ann GOLD said...
on May. 11 2010 at 4:59 pm
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
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i want to say THANK YOU  to everyone who has commented on this piece (and my other work if you have). (: your support is encouraging me to keep writing (even through the heartbreaks!) you guys are truly amazing :) thanks so much again :)

<3/dreamer (:

Boosflash DIAMOND said...
on May. 11 2010 at 4:30 pm
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this is one of the best. and I'm sure these people on teenink can relate to it-its not like anybody believes in love anymore. 5 stars captain.
AlexandraVasari PLATINUM said...
on May. 11 2010 at 3:14 pm
AlexandraVasari PLATINUM, Fort Stewart, Georgia
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I don't think you need my opinion, but I relate to this in everyway and am making it one of my favorites! It's just so full of feeling......:)
inspire.identity. PLATINUM said...
on May. 9 2010 at 8:00 pm
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This is amazing ! 
Volleygirl25 SILVER said...
on May. 9 2010 at 8:56 am
Volleygirl25 SILVER, Pisgah, Alabama
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I love this so much! All the words just flow together perfectly. Thank you for the comment also. :)
lnvo97 GOLD said...
on Apr. 30 2010 at 6:03 pm
lnvo97 GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
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this is most deffinatly something i can relate to!!! AMAZING!!!!! keep up the good job!!!
vnprice BRONZE said...
on Apr. 30 2010 at 10:31 am
vnprice BRONZE, Abita Springs, Louisiana
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This was so great!

I can definitely relate to how you feel, and this is beautiful. Keep up the great work! :D <3

AlexSerino said...
on Apr. 30 2010 at 9:46 am
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This is such a true poem.
Valery5 said...
on Apr. 30 2010 at 9:43 am
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AWWWW!!! I love it! It was great and sad
writergirl13 GOLD said...
on Apr. 22 2010 at 8:19 pm
writergirl13 GOLD, Cherry Hill, New Jersey
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It's not easy to make me cry, but those few stanzas almost did, especially the last one. So beautiful and so true. :')
tennisislovee34 GOLD said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 9:05 pm
tennisislovee34 GOLD, Sterling Heights, Michigan
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This has to be one of my most favorite poems I've ever read on here. Literally. It has a lot of emotion in it, and actually reminds me of this guy from my past. But the point is, THIS IS AMAZING. :)
chelsead BRONZE said...
on Apr. 13 2010 at 11:56 am
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I completely understood this poem and felt like it went directly with my story the "Daydreamer." I loved your end rhyme and how the poem flowed. This is beautiful =] 
LiveLife2theMax GOLD said...
on Apr. 12 2010 at 11:26 am
LiveLife2theMax GOLD, Wicklow, Other
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wow. this is amazing. i loved the way that it didn't rhyme just for the sake, that he rhyming actually made sense. its a great poem.you should be really proud of this one.

i loved it (:

liltrinhle SILVER said...
on Mar. 30 2010 at 11:29 pm
liltrinhle SILVER, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Thank you for your comment on my page!

:]

and I like this piece. A way to improve it is possibly add more imagery to it, so that way the reader can clearly see what and how the speaker is feeling... You said "love" a lot, but you didn't SHOW it as much, ya know?

so I think if that is established more, it would be nothing but wonderful

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Great poem! The last stanza, last line was my favorite! It's a refreshing look at the scenario and I love the line!!!

 

Ashlie94 BRONZE said...
on Mar. 24 2010 at 2:58 pm
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Wow!! You are an amazing writer and i love how your poem has a lot of truth to it. Keep writing. :)
noelleism PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 23 2010 at 8:01 am
noelleism PLATINUM, Russellville, Alabama
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I like this alot. I've had something like this happen to me. But I hope my end is perfect. Love it. keep-it-up.

p.s. not so sure this is a sonnet there supposed to have 14 lines you have 11. :)