'I wonder what this does.'thought Alex looking at the switch in the front of his house. Then
he slowly reached out and pulls down the switch, and falls.(big potato lead) As you've read before
Alex is falling(magic3)into a pit, the wind thrashing(magic 3) his long hair,then time seemed to go
in slow-mo his face screaming(magic 3) bloody murder(humor) but no sound coming out the floor slowly
coming closer(expanded moment) and then WHAM he then hits the hard -as-rock ground. Then feels a
sharp pain crawling up from his arms and legs, and he broke them (expanded moment) in his leg,
both his arm, and his other leg. 'Oh great I broke all of my leg , and my arm bones.(thought shot
& specific details for effect)'Alex thought to himself, and then he sees a face yelling, and
screaming, and scolding (repetition for effect) him and recognizes his dad. 'Father.'Alex
mumbles then everything went black. When he wakes up Alex is hanging upside down. So he then asks
'Father, why are you doing this?''For you.'his father replies. 'NO YOUR NOT!'ALEX
SCREAMED. THEN HE FEELS LIKE HE WAS JUST HIT BY A SHARP STONE, AND HE THEN REALIZES THAT HE'D JUST
BEEN SLAPPPED( figurative language). 'Why are you doing this, just stop'. Then his dad got a
scared-freaked out-mute screaming look (HYPHENATED MODIFIER) 'I wish I could Alex but I need you
and your mom to go, NOW!'And so Alex and his mom left the house with Alex's mom carrying him and
when they looked back at their mad scientist friend the house exploded and Alex and his mom lived a
good new life after that... in the one place that is always peaceful,heaven. (full circle ending)