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May 9, 2011
By austenite GOLD, River Falls, Wisconsin
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austenite GOLD, River Falls, Wisconsin
13 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
...one word from you will silence me forever. If, however, your feelings have changed, I will have to tell you: you have bewitched me, body and soul, and I love....I love...I love you. I never wish to be parted from you from this day on. -Mr. Darcy

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She fought to keep her voice from wavering as she introduced herself. She discreetly wiped her clammy palm on her jeans, and mentally cringed as he looked a bit surprised at the moistness of her hand as he gripped it with his own.

“I…uh…it’s really nice to…meet you.” She forced the words out of her mouth, hating how pathetic and unnatural they sounded.

She smiled painfully as he spoke, and all she heard was a jumbled warbling noise. Just be natural, she told herself. Say whatever jumps into your head.

“I hate talking. I really don’t want to be here. Your shirt is ugly.” The words popped out of her mouth in rapid-fire style before she could stop them.

His face contorted into a mask of cruel laughter. The sound filled her head, echoing and growing louder until it felt like she would burst. Her face flamed as she stuttered hopelessly. Everything slowed and suddenly, she was bent over, staring at his puke-covered shoes.

Oops.

© Rosalie P., Pompton Plains, NJ

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austenite GOLD said...
on Jul. 24 2012 at 9:12 pm
austenite GOLD, River Falls, Wisconsin
13 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
...one word from you will silence me forever. If, however, your feelings have changed, I will have to tell you: you have bewitched me, body and soul, and I love....I love...I love you. I never wish to be parted from you from this day on. -Mr. Darcy

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Thank you so much for the compliments!  They really mean a lot :) I will definitely check out some of your work! Thanks again!
WSwilliams GOLD said...
on Jul. 17 2012 at 4:32 pm
WSwilliams GOLD, Toronto, Ontario, Other
12 articles 3 photos 95 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you keep writing, you will pick up structure. You will pick up form<br /> <br /> - Richard Matheson

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Brilliant! You must have a pretty good english or creative writing teacher. I did feel that this story kind of left me hanging and rushed. Either way, keep up the writing.
kate12345me GOLD said...
on Jul. 16 2012 at 4:34 am
kate12345me GOLD, Sydney, Other
11 articles 0 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Rather than love, than money, than fame, give me truth.&quot; - Thoreau<br /> &quot;Sometimes you&#039;re flush and sometimes you&#039;re bust, and when you&#039;re up, it&#039;s never as good as it seems, and when you&#039;re down, you never think you&#039;ll be up again, but life goes on.&quot;

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HAHA! Awesome stuff ! Loved it, absolutely. I didn't at first, but I read through twice again and I think that that is the whole effect - having to read it more than once to let it impact. I wish I could write like this! Please, if you have time, check out some of my work :) Thanks, and great stuff!
austenite GOLD said...
on Jul. 29 2011 at 11:22 am
austenite GOLD, River Falls, Wisconsin
13 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
...one word from you will silence me forever. If, however, your feelings have changed, I will have to tell you: you have bewitched me, body and soul, and I love....I love...I love you. I never wish to be parted from you from this day on. -Mr. Darcy

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Thank you very much :)
ohmakemeover BRONZE said...
on Jul. 27 2011 at 11:57 pm
ohmakemeover BRONZE, Centerville, Minnesota
3 articles 0 photos 98 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Touch comes before sight, before speech. It is the first language and the last, and it always tells the truth.&quot;- Margaret Atwood

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This was so short but really, really interesting!  I went back and read it several times, picking up little things along the way.  I like how ambiguous it is, because we don't really know who she was talking to.  It could've been her crush, or the president of the U.S, for that matter!  Great job!
austenite GOLD said...
on Jul. 26 2011 at 9:53 pm
austenite GOLD, River Falls, Wisconsin
13 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
...one word from you will silence me forever. If, however, your feelings have changed, I will have to tell you: you have bewitched me, body and soul, and I love....I love...I love you. I never wish to be parted from you from this day on. -Mr. Darcy

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Thanks so much!
silvialuck said...
on Jul. 20 2011 at 10:28 pm
Awesome!  It's detailed and completely possible which just adds to the impact.
Zinaidia SILVER said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 2:49 pm
Zinaidia SILVER, Moreno Valley, California
8 articles 3 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\&quot;Whatever you are, be a good one.\\\&quot;

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Very nice story, the ending had a bit of a twist. You really got talent. 
austenite GOLD said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 2:15 pm
austenite GOLD, River Falls, Wisconsin
13 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
...one word from you will silence me forever. If, however, your feelings have changed, I will have to tell you: you have bewitched me, body and soul, and I love....I love...I love you. I never wish to be parted from you from this day on. -Mr. Darcy

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Thank you so much! I really appreciate you both commenting and reading :)
austenite GOLD said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 2:14 pm
austenite GOLD, River Falls, Wisconsin
13 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
...one word from you will silence me forever. If, however, your feelings have changed, I will have to tell you: you have bewitched me, body and soul, and I love....I love...I love you. I never wish to be parted from you from this day on. -Mr. Darcy

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Thank you!
austenite GOLD said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 2:14 pm
austenite GOLD, River Falls, Wisconsin
13 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
...one word from you will silence me forever. If, however, your feelings have changed, I will have to tell you: you have bewitched me, body and soul, and I love....I love...I love you. I never wish to be parted from you from this day on. -Mr. Darcy

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She can be talking to whoever you'd like her to be talking to :) And thanks!
austenite GOLD said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 2:14 pm
austenite GOLD, River Falls, Wisconsin
13 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
...one word from you will silence me forever. If, however, your feelings have changed, I will have to tell you: you have bewitched me, body and soul, and I love....I love...I love you. I never wish to be parted from you from this day on. -Mr. Darcy

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Eno-Bladz - that's unfortunate!

JustAnotherOwl - Wow! Thanks so much - you're the first person to favorite my work :)

JustAnotherOwl SILVER said...
on Jul. 2 2011 at 4:14 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
6 articles 0 photos 378 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;See, we don&#039;t really care who you are;<br /> Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.<br /> So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer&#039;s disease,<br /> And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Sanctuary&quot;- Paradise Fears

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 I keep going back to read this...I favorited it!
Eno_Bladez GOLD said...
on Jun. 29 2011 at 11:57 am
Eno_Bladez GOLD, Williamsport, Pennsylvania
16 articles 1 photo 81 comments

Favorite Quote:
it&#039;ll be okay, if it&#039;s not okay it&#039;s not over.

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i did something almost exactly like this. wow it's kind of scary how close it is to what i did.
JustAnotherOwl SILVER said...
on Jun. 28 2011 at 7:16 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
6 articles 0 photos 378 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;See, we don&#039;t really care who you are;<br /> Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.<br /> So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer&#039;s disease,<br /> And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Sanctuary&quot;- Paradise Fears

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I agree; simple brilliance! (: That was incredible.
WritingSpasms said...
on Jun. 16 2011 at 8:51 pm
WritingSpasms, Los Angeles, California
0 articles 0 photos 121 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Devils run when a good man goes to war.&quot;<br /> - River Song from Doctor Who (Ep. A Good Man Goes to War)

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That was brilliant. I honestly didn't expect the ending! You did wonderful :)
DaughteroftheTrumpet BRONZE said...
on Jun. 16 2011 at 3:59 pm
DaughteroftheTrumpet BRONZE, East Aurora, New York
2 articles 2 photos 214 comments

Favorite Quote:
Washington Irving once said &ldquo;There is sacredness in tears. They are not the mark of weakness, but of power. They are messengers of overwhelming grief and of unspeakable love.&rdquo;

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anxiety has it's way with people i guess:) nice job:)
JoPepper PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 16 2011 at 11:39 am
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Not all those who wander are lost&quot; --JRR Tolkien<br /> <br /> &quot;When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears.&quot; --Jose&#039; Bergamin

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That was good,  was she talking to a crush or who?  Good job keep writing!!! :D