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"Absence"

April 1, 2014
By pprudhon GOLD, San Jose, California
pprudhon GOLD, San Jose, California
10 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;It does not do to dwell on dreams and forget to live.&quot;<br /> -JK Rowling (Harry Potter and the Sorcerer&#039;s Stone)


At school, she is often distracted by the bustling of people. Their mindless chatter and carefree laughter easing her into a kind of numbness that leaves her present of body but not of mind. It is only in certain moments when she sees through the fog and notices the gap. Moments like at lunch when there is one voice not chiming in.
Perhaps she can escape after school. She tries to lose herself in sports, but when she passes the ball, the person to whom she calls out doesn’t receive it.
On Friday night, they play cards, but one hand never draws.
It seems that there is always one name not called, one chair empty, one smile gone from the picture. No matter how hard she tries, she never seems to be able to forget the vacancy.
The intecom chimes on.
“...and be sure to come to the football game tonight in honor of Richard Miller. May he rest in peace.”
They say the pain fades over time, but really, she will only ever learn to adjust to the absence.



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pprudhon GOLD said...
on Aug. 6 2014 at 1:15 am
pprudhon GOLD, San Jose, California
10 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;It does not do to dwell on dreams and forget to live.&quot;<br /> -JK Rowling (Harry Potter and the Sorcerer&#039;s Stone)

Thank you so much for your comment.  It made my day and I really aprreciate that you put in the time to read my article and give me feedback.  Seriously, it made me smile :) thank you so much.

on Aug. 5 2014 at 11:09 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
325 articles 10 photos 1165 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,<br /> More real than solid earth;<br /> And to these death does not mean decay,<br /> But only another birth" <br /> - Isabella Banks

Yet again filling me with awe! This was really easy to follow, and kept me guessing the entire time. You're going to be a bestselling author someday, and I can't wait! All of your work is  super emotional, relatable, and so perfect in my eyes. :) Never stop writing, because if you do the world shall be missing something vitally important, and your work is too amazing to be ignored. XD KEEP WRITING. ;)

on Aug. 4 2014 at 12:11 pm
Kestrel135 PLATINUM, Waterford, Connecticut
43 articles 0 photos 256 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Respect existence or expect resistance&quot;

This was a very strong piece! At first, you aren't sure what is going on, but the perfect ending reveals the truth and gives the strongest emotional impact of the story. You kept the suspence until the end, which is what keeps the reader reading and makes the reveal even more meaningful. This was very well done. I've never been able to make such an emotional story so concise and so beautiful in such a short amount of words. Definitely keep writing!

on Aug. 4 2014 at 8:21 am
uncomfortableBrunette SILVER, Lr. Sackville, Other
5 articles 13 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
I want to hate you half as much as i hate myself

Wow. That is really emotional! BTW you spelt intercom wrong. Other than that I think it was good! I like how you hinted at someone not being there, but didn't come out and say who and why, right away.