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57 Feet

October 20, 2010
By Bayla SILVER, Hyde Park, New York
Bayla SILVER, Hyde Park, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Reach for the stars, kid....Heaven's not too far kid....~Shaun Diviney of Short Stack


She fell 57 feet, and never saw anything but him. She never looked up and noticed how far she fell. She couldn’t see anything but his face, his swift hair, his mannerisms. She fell 57 feet and barely noticed. She was wrapped in his arms, wrapped in his kiss, wrapped in his love. She fell 57 feet to the ground, and never blinked an eye.


The way he walked, the way he talked. The first 10 feet were crazy, she was confused and didn’t know what to do. Then she hit 15 feet, and she knew she liked him. 20 feet and she was crushing. 23 feet made her flirt with him a bit. Winking, smiling, and blowing kisses all the way to 27 feet.


27 feet from the ground and he asked her on a date. 30 feet and she hit the butterflies. They landed in her stomach and refused to leave until 35 feet, when he kissed her cheek after the movie. She swooned at every sighting of him until she was 39 feet from that rooftop and they went to homecoming. He bought a corsage, wrapped it around her wrist, and kissed her on the hand.


She nearly fainted, but stayed conscious to make it to 40 feet when they slow danced to her favourite song. She sped to 43 feet when he kissed her on the lips for the first time in the gym at the dance. Her heart thumped in and out of time at 48 feet, she was 48 feet from the sky so quickly she didn’t even think. He asked her to be his forever.


at 55 feet from her starting point, she kissed him again, and at 57 feet from her beloved, safe rooftop, he caught her. She fell 57 feet in love with him, and there was no way of getting back. She wouldn’t go back to that rooftop. She wouldn’t fall again.


She was on the ground now, whether he continued to hold her there, right on the sidewalk beneath her rooftop, or if he dropped her there and never looked back. She would still be 57 feet in love with him.

The author's comments:
A little play on the phrase about "falling" in love....

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Bayla SILVER said...
on Dec. 21 2010 at 2:43 pm
Bayla SILVER, Hyde Park, New York
6 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
Reach for the stars, kid....Heaven's not too far kid....~Shaun Diviney of Short Stack

Thanks to everyone! ♥

on Nov. 20 2010 at 10:02 pm
RockerrChikk., Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Learn From Your Mistakes.

Its So Very Cuteeee!

Very Descriptive(:


Dayne22 SILVER said...
on Nov. 12 2010 at 9:11 pm
Dayne22 SILVER, Las Cruces, New Mexico
6 articles 31 photos 82 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Simplicity is the ultimate form of sophistication"- Leonardo DaVinci "Sometimes people are beautiful. Not in looks. Not in what they say. Just in what they are" -Markus Zusak "I'm just trying to be me... Whoever that is" Unknown

Oh my gawsh!!! this is so adorable! I love it love it love it!!darn im only at 23 ft. got a long ways to go hahaha

on Nov. 10 2010 at 5:38 pm
Stargirl212 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"No matter how dark the sky, you'll always have the stars."

Amazing!! Such a good metaphor :)

on Nov. 9 2010 at 10:25 pm
believeinmexoxo GOLD, Brewster, New York
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Favorite Quote:
If you love something let it go and if it comes back to you, it’s yours forever- Anonymous

Aww...this is so cute! I love how you describe love as falling deeper and deeper and not up. Keep up the good work :)

on Nov. 9 2010 at 4:10 pm
BurningRose SILVER, New Fairfield, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
I dunno.

omg this is great!!! keep it up!!!!

TerraTAZz GOLD said...
on Nov. 9 2010 at 10:35 am
TerraTAZz GOLD, Sapulpa, Oklahoma
18 articles 3 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
Nobody goes through life without a scar.<br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> -carol burnett

I loveee that way iy descibes love!!! YOu are an amazingg writeeeerr!!!

on Nov. 8 2010 at 9:09 pm
lena.ivette BRONZE, Colorado Springs, Colorado
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this was so good! i loved it! very cute :)

on Nov. 8 2010 at 5:04 pm
keembahhh SILVER, Fullerton, California
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Favorite Quote:
the past is the past[: put it behind you and let it go and it wont come back to bite you in the ass

i loved it! it was amazing!

on Nov. 8 2010 at 3:50 pm
FlyingNewt BRONZE, Bloomington, Indiana
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Interesting way of writing, i love it good job!