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The uprising of commoners

May 22, 2024
By Jerrywu, Nanjing, Other
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Author's note:

I enjoy reading books, especially fantasy and sci-fi. When reading these books, I feel like I am being transported to another world, yet I still find something similar between that world and my own. There is always a sense of panic every time I finish one book because I have to find another book as good as the previous one. Recently, I thought it would be a good idea to start writing my own story. The fiction I wrote was inspired by "The Hunger Games" by Suzanne Collins. These sorts of stories never fail to fascinate me. Anyways, I hope you like my fiction.

Egbert stood still outside the glorious and magical palace in the center of the town, looking blankly at those smoking factories.

“They are burning coal,” Egbert thought hatefully, “the coal from that cursed cave.”

He patted off the dust from the ground and rubbed his knees. They still ached from being thrown onto the ground by the guards in the elite’s palace.

“This had to stop. Those selfish elites and uncommoners just think about themselves. What's the big deal in having affinities? Just an additional useless Charge. Where do they use them? Nowhere! What makes them the head of Verdia? What gives them the right to step on us, commoners? Well, if you don't agree to stop mining in the Turner's Caves, I will fight against you elites for my father and my friend, Miguel. They cannot die for nothing.” Egbert thought.

As he walked along the streets outside the town, he passed another palace. The front yard was splendid. Blocks of soil with flowers planted on their sides floated in the air. A stream of water flew out of the palace’s second floor into the pool beneath the blocks of flowers. Under the blocks was a chubby man floating on the sea in a grey robe with a small round badge and an image of lightning on his chest. He was an elite member of the Duilius family. The robe slightly glowed, probably because the material reacted with the Charge supporting the floating blocks of flowers. He tore down a strip of ethereal blue seaweed-like fruit in the basket on his belly and put it in his mouth. Then, he chewed, and juice came flowing out of his mouth.

The singing laughter of a child floating in the air, symphonic like a bell, Egbert couldn’t help but look for the child. Behind the splashing waterfall was a little girl in a beautiful, long azure dress. Running and waving a delicately curved wooden horse, she got to her father, probably to have more of the seaweed-like plant.

Hearing his daughter, the man quickly got to his feet, and after tearing down a long stripe of the fruit from his basket, he took another basket from the corner of the yard. Smiling lovingly at his daughter, the man gently separated the long stripe of the fruit into small pieces and put one carefully in her mouth. The girl chewed happily as she asked for more.

“More? Oh my, Charlotte, first time hearing! Have them all if you can!” as the man pushed the basket into the girl’s small arms.

It was at this moment that Egbert and the girl’s eyes met. After scanning Egbert up and down for some time, the girl pointed to Egbert outside the gate and stared at his father.

“Father, give him some Clap plant too. He looks so hungry.”

The man smiled at her daughter gently, "It's called the keaest plant.”

“Father, give him! Give him!”

Egbert was startled to hear this. Then he turned to walk away, only to be stopped by the man.

“Hey, boy. Have some Keaest plant. It’s a gift from Charlotte.” With a reluctant look on his face, entirely different from what he had looking at his daughter, the man walked towards Egbert.

Seeing his father did as she asked, Charlotte happily ran off to play with her toys, the basket of keenest plants in her hands.

Though he hadn't eaten for days, his stomach mumbling for food, Egbert refused and turned to get away, ignoring the man.

The man looked behind himself, ensuring his daughter was not looking, and changed into a cruel face.

“Yo, boy. Get back here now, or I’ll use the Charge. You know how good I am.”

The Duilius family made a name for themselves as the best of Verdia, who can control how people move via the ancient power of the continent, the Charge. No one was ever able to resist the power.

Unwillingly, Egbert turned back and glanced hatefully at the obese man.

The man tore a tiny piece of the keaest fruit and threw it onto the ground without looking at Egbert.

"It is from the Nettling Sound. Now accept this kindness of Charlotte’s. Do this, and I will also complete my daily demand to be kind twice daily."

The keaest plant looked magnificent. On the surface was the sparkling glint of spots. The plant's juice flew out from landing on the ground and left a round circle of water stain.

Egbert hesitated before picking up the small block of the keaest plant. Looking fearfully at the man, he put it in the mouse. Though a layer of dust on one side of the plant made it taste salty, the fruit itself was like a drop of concentrate of all the sweetness and happiness in the world.

The man looked satisfied. With his eyes on his ragged clothes, the man said, "You're from the mines, believe."

Still looking down at the small water stain left on the pavement by the plant, Egbert nodded.

“You know what, our good old Mateo recently decided to trick some honest young man like you into exploring more of the Turner’s Caves. It is said that there are tons of diamonds in there. Clearly, he didn’t take the young man who died in the caves so seriously.”

“What? For real?”

“For real! There will be more lost or dead in the caves. But why do they matter? What they bring is wealth and the uprise of Hane!” smirked the man.

Shocked and irritated, Egbert immediately turned away and sped up to walk away from the palace. He heard the man's angry voices behind him, yelling and swearing.

“Yo, boy! Get back on your knees, and thank you for Charlotte's kindness! Or, I will use the Charge!"

With his head full of anger, he cared nothing about the pathetic Charge. What he wanted to do first was to leave this cursed place and probably find a group of people who thought the same as he did.

Out of the high-rise factories and palaces were villages and villages of small, crowded, broken huts and tents. Villagers difficultly traveled through the narrow path between the huts with baskets of cold, moldy bowls of stew-like zucchini in their hands. Egbert rushed back to his broken mud hut and packed.

He had nothing to pack, really. All his clothes were the mining overall, which was burnt black. Patches were everywhere. Egbert looked toward the window. On the windowsill was a rockflower plant in a flowerpot. As the sun shone through the window and cast its lights upon the rock-colored small flower with four petals, his memories flushed back to the Cave, to the burning flames.

 

It was hot, as if he was in Hell. The black smoke above them was choking. Flames lit up Miguel's face. Miguel was a handsome young man. Despite the dust and bruises, he had a delicate face, yet his life had to end there.

The burnt skin on the left half of his face itched like needles piercing through him.

He ran wildly. He remembered the stream of dying pain that went straight into his heart every time his feet landed on the rough, hard ground. He remembered the hope and the lights he saw in the distance. He collapsed onto the ground, staring desperately at the flames dancing teasingly.

 

If the elites had stopped mining in Turner's Caves when his father and many other miners died in an explosion in the mine, all of this would not have happened. Yet, those egocentric elites just thought about themselves.

 

“But why do they matter? What they bring is wealth and the uprise of Hane!”

 

Something similar happened in the morning.

 

"Compared to the great empire of Verdia, why do a few commoners' lives matter?" Mateo, the elite, petted heavily on Egbert's shoulders. As he was grabbed up and dragged out by the guards, he looked back and saw Mateo sneering viciously at Egbert.

 

There had to be someone to end this. Verdia was sick and dying because of the inequality. Commoners worked day and night only to get a meal that was hardly enough for being half full. While those elites sit there enjoying rare fruits and meals of the land, wasting their time and wasting their access to the Charge, waiting for more wealth and food coming for them, never caring about those who died for a tiny basket of fruit in their hands. He had to do it for his father and friend Miguel, but he was too weak to do it alone. He needed support.

His handbook fell to the ground and awakened him from memories and thoughts. Egbert picked it up and stared at the map of Verdia he had drawn. The vast land of Verdia was like an eagle landing on a tree branch. The small town of Hane lay on the tip of its wing on the northeastern corner. At the southwestern tip of Verdia, the two cities of Hope and Mercy were his destinations. The two cities were built by the two princesses who ran away from the cruel ruler of the Kingdom of Turion during the Revival Ages. Though centuries had passed, he believed that, like their names, he would find supporters.

Putting the handbook back into the suitcase, he got up and walked to the door. He looked back at the empty little hut he had lived in since birth. As he was glancing through the furniture, his eyes eventually lay on the windowsill.

On it was the rockflower his tears fell on when he got out of the Turner's Caves without Miguel. Egbert looked closely at it. It was a regular and unnoticeable flower. It had the color of rocks and the simple shape of four petals around an ordinary stamen. It was like Miguel. It was like him, Egbert. It was like every unnoticeable uncommoner in the villages outside Hane. However, there was a one-in-a-million chance that the flower could produce a zestberry. This mythical fruit was believed to carry healing properties and the ability to bless one with good luck and prosperity. Maybe someday, one of the uncommoners can become someone eye-catching and famous, just like the zestberry.

He put it into the suitcase and left without looking back at the town, though knowing there was no coming back. He heard people murmuring behind him, questioning and blaming him for doing something so rebellious.

"It has been like this for centuries. What could he do?"

“I bet he gets killed before he reaches somewhere with people.”

“Traitor!”

“……”

After weeks of meadows, forests, hills, and mountains, Egbert eventually reached the town of Mercy. A white marble statue of a beautiful princess stood tall before the gate leading into the city. The statue looked ahead of her, hands raising to catch a landing dove. The sculpture's texture felt smooth and new, yet it was first built several centuries ago.

On walking towards the gates, he noticed that the city of Mercy was quite different from the mining city of Hane he came from. Instead of the factories and sparkling palaces of the elites, the whole city was of houses painted in white and blue without those high-rises pointing into the sky.

When he was about to enter the town, guards walked out from behind the high, stony walls and blocked his way. On each of their collars was a small round badge of a dove.

“Elites,” Egbert groaned.

“Sire, why am I not allowed?” Egbert demanded.

“Why am I not allowed?” a guard mimicked teasingly. The guard made a face and sneered, "Do you know who lives inside? The elites! Look at you. Dirty clothes with patches, filthy face, unshaved mustache and beard. What are you? Oh, yes, you're a beggar. Sorry. Here you go, then. I will give you mercy in the name of Mercy."

The guard reached out into his pocket, took out a round bronze coin, and threw the coin onto the ground. Laughing out loud hard, the guards walked back behind the walls. The laughing lingered in the air for some time before finally dying away.

“Bad news! Bad news…”

From behind him, another ragged man just like him ran toward the guards, yelling words.

Egbert was going to tell him it was useless. Before he knew it, the guards quickly appeared from behind the walls and listened carefully to him. All of them stood straight and looked at the man seriously. Egbert looked closely at the man to see what was different about him from himself. The man had a head full of white, messy, long hair. His mustache floated in the air as a blow of wind passed. Patches were everywhere, up and down his clothes. The man was the same as Egbert, like any other commoner, yet…

“The farmers of Bright are still refusing to work, and the boss asked for higher wages. If it goes on like this, the crops will die. It will be a huge loss to Mercy. And the citizens of Hope are gathering secretly. They are talking about having a revolution. They want to take the city of Mercy first. Things are worsening. Something had to be prepared, or it would be another period of dark ages!"

The guards nodded thoughtfully and took out their wallets to pay the man a large wad of money. The man happily received the wad with both hands and disappeared.

“Traitor!” murmured Egbert as he finally collapsed, exhausted.

Egbert picked up the bronze coin from the ground and stared at it carefully. It was rusted, and the surface was rough. The tarnished coin had lost its shining reflected lights just like the city of Mercy had lost its mercy and its purpose of tolerance. Inequality, too, had slowly crept into Mercy, making it rot. All those stories of Mercy were only the wrappers outside the rotten fruit.

He had been through worse.

 

The horning sound grew louder and louder. The crowd waiting to get outside the port city, Karvolt, looked back and spotted a wagon pulled by four horses charging at them in the distance. There was no stopping. The horses were accelerating, and it happened as Egbert had feared. The wagon crashed over the screaming crowd, jumped over the railings blocking the way out, and disappeared into the woods. In panic, Egbert got aside just in time, but the poor man beside him was not lucky enough. He was then lying painfully on the ground, moaning. His body and arms were twisted at an impossible angle, and he was spitting blood onto the ground. Egbert was about to duck down to help the man when the stout elite jumped down from the railings onto the man and walked away into the distance. The poor man spat another mouthful of blood before closing his eyes.

 

It was chilling cold when Egbert woke up, his back aching from sleep on the hard ground. The sun was rising up above the horizon. In front of him, in the distance, was the sea. It glittered under the saturated sunrise like scattered crystals.

The words of that commoner lingered and swirled in his brain. The seed of rebelling had been planted. People have realized what a poor situation they are in. He will find allies on the continent! Together, they will end the rule of the elites and start a new age for Verdia.

He opened the suitcase and took out the rockflower pot. A gentle breeze brushed across his cheeks, foundling his burnt skin. In the breeze, the rockflower swayed back and forth. Egbert had heard that the rockflower was the most vigorous plant on Verdia, for it could survive any harsh environment, from the hypoxia and icy mountain tops of the Kroll Mountains beside Hane to the arid deserts in the north. They might encounter gales and storms, yet they always survive and stand firmly against those oppressing them.

Hope was the place to start his journey, thought Egbert, as he looked at the rising sun.

It was nearly noon when Egbert eventually arrived at the city of Hope on the opposite shoreside of the sea. What he saw amazed him. Like Mercy, Hope also had a sculpture of a princess standing in front of the walls, yet it was broken. Cracks were all over the sculpture, and the original surface of it turned blackish. Moreover, the face of the sculpture was blurry. It was supposed to be pointing forward from the remnants of the sculpture, but the arm was lost, leaving only the shoulder. Small pieces of white marble stones were all over the ground.

Egbert was even more surprised to notice that the outer walls of Hope were decaying. Vines and moss grew wildly on the gaps between the stones and enclosed the city. Through the gates, the inside of the town was filled with smoke and dust. In the misty air were the collapsed and caved-in houses. People were chasing each other, swearing and cursing. It was entire chaos.

He walked toward the dilapidated walls, hoping that at least he could give a speech to the citizens. Carefully stepping across the gate of the walls, he signed with relief when he finally got inside. The air was of acid and rotten odor like he had been breathing in the mines of the Turner's Caves for ages. Piled with gravel and broken wood boards, the muddy ground was bumpy and rough. A man ran swiftly in front of him, nearly crashed into him, and disappeared into the narrow alley.

A square of open lands appeared as Egbert walked out from an alley. In the middle of the square was a crumbled wooden temple with its roof missing. The outer layer of the temple was decaying, and much of the wood had fallen out, leaving the inside part of the temple visible. A rusted iron statue of a god-like person stood within. Iron pieces had fallen off its face, leaving dark holes in the place where its right eye was supposed to be. The statue held a long sword up with both hands in front of it. Though the sculpture was rough, with rust covering it, the complex feelings of concern and profound disappointment in its eyes were still visible.

This was the perfect place for the speech.

Egbert put down the suitcase and took out the script he had written before setting off. The paper was wrinkled, and the words were faded, yet the words were carved deep in his mind.

“Dear citizens of Hope,

“I stand before you today not as a figure of power or privilege but as one of you—a commoner from Hane, just like many of you gathered here. I seek your support, not for myself, but for a cause that affects us all: the fight against inequality in our beloved land of Verdia.”

People started gathering around the small square of land.

“Have you, like me, felt the weight of oppression bearing down upon you from the elites, those few who hold affinities and wield the mysterious power of the Charge? Have you felt the sting of exclusion, denied entry to other cities simply because you lacked this gift? Have you toiled endlessly, hoping for a chance at education and advancement, only to be turned away because you were not born with affinities?”

People yelled in agreement. Their faces shone with light, the light of rebelling.

“What of our labor, sweat, and toil sustains this land? We are the backbone of Verdia, yet we scrape by on meager earnings. At the same time, the elites luxuriate in their palaces, untouched by the hardships we endure. It is a cruel injustice born of centuries of inequality.

“Yes, those with affinities indeed possess a unique talent, but ask yourselves: do they truly put it to good use? Do they use their power to uplift all of Verdia, or do they hoard it for their own gain, leaving us to suffer in their shadow?

“We can no longer stand idly by and accept this state of affairs. We have endured hardships since the darkest days of our history—the Revival Ages, the Dark Decennium, the Primitive Ages—and yet, we have persisted. But persistence is not enough. We must rise up and demand change.

“Together, we have the power to forge a new Verdia—a Verdia where our worth is recognized, where every citizen receives their due. But I cannot do this alone. I need you to stand beside me and lend your voices to this cause.

“Yes, I may falter, for I am only one person. But united, we are unstoppable. Together, we can build a future where equality reigns, where the divisions of the past are erased, and every citizen can genuinely thrive.

“So, I implore you, my fellow commoners of Hope: join me in this fight. Together, let us build a new Verdia for ourselves and generations. Thank you.”

Egbert bowed gracefully. Though he was still in his mining overall, he felt himself a brave warrior with a sword in hand. He was the fuse of the bomb that eliminated the current inequality. Those curious faces looked at Egbert, this courageous young man from the north mining town of Hane.

People gathered around him, hoping to share their ideas. From their firm eyes, Egbert knew that he had succeeded.

Minutes later, a few men in uniform riding a wagon pulled by horses, with small round badges and the image of a star on their chests, squeezed through the crowd and arrested Egbert. However hard the crowds tried to hinder the wagon from leaving, the elites still managed to drive through the crowd with the help of affinities.

Egbert looked back through the window. People shouted furiously at the distancing wagon, "Build a new Verdia!"

"Against inequality, one is weak. Yet, united, all shall be unstoppable." Egbert thought.

 

A man in a dark brown hood picked up the suitcase and opened it. The pot of flowers attracted his eyes. A green unripe berry stood on the flower's stamen with four rock-colored petals. Soon, it would ripen.



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