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When the Darkness Comes

September 1, 2009
By jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
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&quot;Don&#039;t gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold.&quot; <br /> <br /> &quot;You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer.&quot;

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The darkness surrounds me and persuades me,
trying to swallow me whole.
Its' eyes and face is iced over,
and its' heart is blacker than coal.

The beating of my steady heart
tries to save me from my doom.
But inside of me I helplessly plead
that this will all end soon.

The shadows creep up upon me,
and turn the light away
The flowers and the sun
won’t be returning today.

So when the darkness covers me
and the time on the clock ticks dry,
I’ll surrender myself to the ground
and let my soul ascend to the sky.

The author's comments:
I wrote this at 12:15 in the morning when I woke up from a nightmare. The idea just sort of came to me, and I wrote this within 5 minutes :) Hope you like it, and please leave comments! :)
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Bookwormwriter SILVER said...
on Sep. 3 2010 at 9:11 pm
Bookwormwriter SILVER, Centerville, Ohio
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to any and all who see this, please read, comment and rate my work!  no one seems to want to comment on it.  :( thanks!

OMG HOW ARE YOU COMING UP WITH ALL THESE AMAZING AWESOME MIND-BLOWING POEMS!  JUST STOP!  your going to make me go crazy with all this jealousy that im not this good!

greg9381 GOLD said...
on Aug. 15 2010 at 6:28 pm
greg9381 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
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*poem sorry
greg9381 GOLD said...
on Aug. 15 2010 at 6:27 pm
greg9381 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
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interesting! The way you describe the darkness, it sounds creepy. Don't worry about doom and soon not rhyming, (someone mentioned that in another comment) slant rhymes add flavor! (not like...taste, but interest). And thanks for your comment on my poema
Love_Kills_the_Blind PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 10 2010 at 8:45 pm
Love_Kills_the_Blind PLATINUM, Fort Collins, Colorado
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You continue to amaze me! Incredible keep on going! :)
Boosflash DIAMOND said...
on May. 11 2010 at 4:38 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Papillion, Nebraska
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"the flowers and the sun wont be returning today"-well how about that......5 stars captain. ch-ching.
AlexandraVasari PLATINUM said...
on May. 11 2010 at 3:22 pm
AlexandraVasari PLATINUM, Fort Stewart, Georgia
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You never fail to amaze me!Great job, yet again!:)
--LoveHappens-- said...
on May. 11 2010 at 3:18 pm
--LoveHappens--, Fairfield, Connecticut
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wow I really liked this is was truly powerful and full of strong words and emotions. Great job. Please Please Please read my story called The Pretty One and leave a comment thanks!!!!!!
Chibbie1 PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 21 2010 at 3:57 pm
Chibbie1 PLATINUM, Atlanta, Georgia
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this is quiet wonderful please look at mine and tell me how you feel for it would be great to find out how you feel about it

 

HPGGMRAR GOLD said...
on Mar. 28 2010 at 6:53 pm
HPGGMRAR GOLD, Kennesaw, Georgia
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I read your comment after I read the poem and I guessed it must have been written after something like that. I never would have guessed you wrote it in 5 minutes, amazing as usual!
munkyman95 GOLD said...
on Mar. 20 2010 at 6:09 am
munkyman95 GOLD, Medway, Other
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Wow this is really good too, you're an amazing poet, to me you're better than a lot of professionals this gave really vivid emotion and made you feel as trapped as the writer
vickilovesu0227 SILVER said...
on Feb. 17 2010 at 10:08 am
vickilovesu0227 SILVER, Bellefonte, Pennsylvania
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&quot;Love is giving someone the power to break your heart, but trusting them not to.&quot;

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Wow! I can say the same for you. You put so much emotion into your work. I think that you should send some work to a publishing company.
writeoutloud said...
on Feb. 15 2010 at 3:15 pm
this is very well written. i like the imagery of a clock ticking dry as well as flowers and sunlight vanishing to be replaced by a blanket of darkness. its dripping with emotion; raw. i like it a lot.
VampiericRain GOLD said...
on Jan. 23 2010 at 4:08 pm
VampiericRain GOLD, Amarillo, Texas
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When you say the darkness, it made me think of some kind of monster. This is an excellent peice to be written in five minutes.
Bliss SILVER said...
on Dec. 31 2009 at 4:32 pm
Bliss SILVER, Poland, Ohio
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I really like this. Its very deep! Goood poetry.
hxcRocker DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 22 2009 at 4:18 am
hxcRocker DIAMOND, Haiku, Hawaii
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This poem is great. It really conveys the fear and darkness in everyone's heart
keikori BRONZE said...
on Nov. 27 2009 at 7:47 pm
keikori BRONZE, Place, Virginia
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This is wonderful, very well written, and very emotional
sarahxinsane921 SILVER said...
on Oct. 28 2009 at 5:24 pm
sarahxinsane921 SILVER, St. Charles, Missouri
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I Really Like This Poem.

Its Soo Well Wriiten, Its Inspiring.

Keep Writing.
justjessie GOLD said...
on Oct. 24 2009 at 7:17 pm
justjessie GOLD, Lakeland, Florida
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very good, i like the last line, descriptive and clear peice. great work
AlextheKat27 SILVER said...
on Oct. 19 2009 at 8:57 pm
AlextheKat27 SILVER, Mesa, Arizona
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&quot;When confronted by a difficult problem, you can solve it more easily by reducing it to the question, &quot;How would the Lone Ranger handle this?&quot; --Dilbert

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Hey thanks for the comment! :) I've been checking out your work and this one is my favorite, I love that last stanza, beautiful.
Free.The.Poison PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 8 2009 at 6:30 am
Free.The.Poison PLATINUM, Hanford, California
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Even in our Darkest hour, we must always remember never to spare.

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Nice poem. God job at ryhming and making sense when doing so.