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June 11, 2010
By Inherinerd GOLD, Ashland, Ohio
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Burning fire runs through my being
darkness grips my consciousness
of all the things I used to be
silence and sorrow's all that's left.

Chocolate curls and grass green eyes
now tauntingly wrapped in lies
If only now I could forget
the burning love that died.

© Lindsey Dennis, Marblehead, MA

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This is inspired by the book i am writing.
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sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 27 2010 at 2:51 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Definitely... none of the fluffly comments. Just tell it like it is please... Thanks!
Inherinerd GOLD said...
on Jul. 27 2010 at 2:50 pm
Inherinerd GOLD, Ashland, Ohio
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Of course I can!! and i will try and give you honest feedback if thats what you want!!
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 27 2010 at 2:49 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Hey I'm not trying to say that I just wrote all these comments for payback, BUT if you ever have the chance I would really appreciate it if you could read some of my stuff. :)

 

Inherinerd GOLD said...
on Jul. 27 2010 at 2:48 pm
Inherinerd GOLD, Ashland, Ohio
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Okay i was a little confused!! :)
Inherinerd GOLD said...
on Jul. 27 2010 at 2:47 pm
Inherinerd GOLD, Ashland, Ohio
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A word to the wise ain't nessecary it's the stupid ones that need the advise

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thanks its not the longest and most heart wrenching piece or anything i just wrote it for fun!
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 27 2010 at 2:46 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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I mean I'm NOT just saying that

 

sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 27 2010 at 2:46 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

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Good again!! This is really cool. I love the last stanza... and I'm just saying that... haha ;)

 

Inherinerd GOLD said...
on Jul. 21 2010 at 6:54 pm
Inherinerd GOLD, Ashland, Ohio
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Cool!! and thank you!! I really like to write poetry although i'm not the best at it!! :)
ELM522 DIAMOND said...
on Jul. 21 2010 at 6:34 pm
ELM522 DIAMOND, Selden, New York
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This is beautiful!!! I love poetry, and I am part of my school's literary magazine, and I have to say this is one of the best I've ever read!!! This also ties in with the saga I'm writing now!