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Dance of the River

December 24, 2010
By Kai17 GOLD, Spokane, Washington
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*beepbeep* <br /> &quot;Where to, Miss?&quot; <br /> &quot;To the stars.&quot;

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Here I lay
Limp
Malleable
Battered by the waves
Bashing against the rocks
Arms and legs
Floating
At unnatural angles
Unbidden
Separate from me

My vision
Cloudy
Branches and leaves
Fly by my
In a crazy
Chaotic dance
Of the river

Above me
Is lacy white
Heavenly
Floating and bubbly
Below me
Is the still
Deceptive dark
Calling me down
To a peaceful rest

As my eyes begin
To close
Just as I decide
To give up
I am pulled out
Of the dance
Fire spreads through
My body
The pain
Is unbearable
But I bear it
Because it tells me

I'm
Alive

© Piper C.

The author's comments:
I was eating dinner next to the river, and wondering what it would be like to be stuck in said river. Besides; I wanted to capture the deadly beauty of the falls, and it reminded me of a dance.
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poetic.eyes PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 23 2011 at 6:28 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
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eARTh

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you are absolutely welcome!
Kai17 GOLD said...
on Jul. 23 2011 at 4:25 pm
Kai17 GOLD, Spokane, Washington
17 articles 5 photos 339 comments

Favorite Quote:
*beepbeep* <br /> &quot;Where to, Miss?&quot; <br /> &quot;To the stars.&quot;

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=) Thank you ever so much.
poetic.eyes PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 23 2011 at 3:42 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
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Different from the Wolf, but just as wonderful!!!!
Kai17 GOLD said...
on Jul. 21 2011 at 11:42 am
Kai17 GOLD, Spokane, Washington
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*beepbeep* <br /> &quot;Where to, Miss?&quot; <br /> &quot;To the stars.&quot;

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Thank you so much!

It really depends on what meaning you're looking for. Seperate (for me, at least) implied a mental distinction; the person isn't thinking of them as her limbs anymore. Seperated would imply that they've been (shudder) removed. Either one would work, though.

IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 21 2011 at 5:00 am
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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&lrm;&quot;I&rsquo;m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don&rsquo;t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world.&quot; - Beyonc&eacute;

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And shouldn't separate in the first stanza be separated?
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 21 2011 at 4:58 am
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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&lrm;&quot;I&rsquo;m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don&rsquo;t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world.&quot; - Beyonc&eacute;

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I agree that sometimes pain is what makes us alive... Good job in this poem!!!
Kai17 GOLD said...
on Jun. 2 2011 at 5:19 pm
Kai17 GOLD, Spokane, Washington
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*beepbeep* <br /> &quot;Where to, Miss?&quot; <br /> &quot;To the stars.&quot;

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Thank you. The poem started as a writing exercise, but turned into something else. Not quite sure what.

Anyway, thanks again.

Kfuzesi13 SILVER said...
on Jun. 2 2011 at 4:20 pm
Kfuzesi13 SILVER, Someplace, New Jersey
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Nice poem. It is quite a scary thought: what would it be like to be stuck in a river. And then I like the end... pain makes alive? makes us human? I think you have a lot to play with in this poem.
Kai17 GOLD said...
on Jan. 11 2011 at 9:08 am
Kai17 GOLD, Spokane, Washington
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*beepbeep* <br /> &quot;Where to, Miss?&quot; <br /> &quot;To the stars.&quot;

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Thank you so much!
theheartoflizz PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 10 2011 at 4:47 pm
theheartoflizz PLATINUM, Aurora, Colorado
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This is wonderfully written, and very powerful. I loved to imagery in this poem,and the last line gives you chills. I don't think this is depressing, more so a beautifl darkness. I love it! :)