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The world inside my head (For want of better words)

July 5, 2011
By IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Words chase each other around my head, blabbering, incoherent;
the half-formed heads of fairytale stories, never finished, never ending.
Wispy, like white eiderdown. Slowly floating to the bottom of my skull, there to stagnate in an eternal pool.
Occasionally, gravity reverses itself, they float up, towards the sunny-blue sky that is the top of my brunette head.
Together, the words solidify, and form stories, stories for you to read, stories for me to write.
Is your head the same?

© Ashley P., Galesburg, IL

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leafy said...
on Nov. 1 2011 at 4:43 pm
leafy, City, Other
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Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: I hate it.&nbsp;<br /> Gil: You haven&#039;t even read it yet.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: If it&#039;s bad, I&#039;ll hate it. If it&#039;s good, then I&#039;ll be envious and hate it even more. You don&#039;t want the opinion of another writer.&nbsp;

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ht.t.p.://teenink.c.o.m/forums?act=post&topic_id=16&thread_id=54647&page=2
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 22 2011 at 2:07 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Thanks for the comment :)
Little.Miss said...
on Oct. 21 2011 at 3:47 pm
This is pretty good... long lines, but other than that it was neat.
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 20 2011 at 7:48 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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 Oh wow, I was wondering if that might have been the case... :D 

Can you remind me where it is?

leafy said...
on Oct. 20 2011 at 7:38 pm
leafy, City, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: I hate it.&nbsp;<br /> Gil: You haven&#039;t even read it yet.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: If it&#039;s bad, I&#039;ll hate it. If it&#039;s good, then I&#039;ll be envious and hate it even more. You don&#039;t want the opinion of another writer.&nbsp;

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You won my poetry contest! ^_^
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 20 2011 at 6:40 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Really? Thank you! 

Why do you have to read my stuff?


leafy said...
on Oct. 20 2011 at 5:06 pm
leafy, City, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: I hate it.&nbsp;<br /> Gil: You haven&#039;t even read it yet.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: If it&#039;s bad, I&#039;ll hate it. If it&#039;s good, then I&#039;ll be envious and hate it even more. You don&#039;t want the opinion of another writer.&nbsp;

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You're welcome! Glad to help, and unlike some people when I have to read their things, I truly enjoy looking at your things :)
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 20 2011 at 4:24 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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He really does have a way with words :)

Thanks for the comment Leafy :D

 

leafy said...
on Oct. 19 2011 at 7:56 am
leafy, City, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: I hate it.&nbsp;<br /> Gil: You haven&#039;t even read it yet.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: If it&#039;s bad, I&#039;ll hate it. If it&#039;s good, then I&#039;ll be envious and hate it even more. You don&#039;t want the opinion of another writer.&nbsp;

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I couldn't have said it better myself raven, you seem to always have a way with words ^_^. Though I do agree, with an above comment, the lines should be shortened in my opinion
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 2 2011 at 7:19 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Yeah, it's one of my older poems, I just posted it because my friend wanted to read it.
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 2 2011 at 7:08 pm
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
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I love the words, especialy in the 5th line, but I think the lines are too long. The rhythm doesn't really make sense.
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 1 2011 at 4:18 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Haha, Le hannon :D
HeatherBee BRONZE said...
on Sep. 1 2011 at 8:31 am
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper<br /> <br /> Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

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:) I dont know what to say... this was awesome!! I <3 the descriptions
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 10 2011 at 4:24 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Eehehehe, that's hilarious, no apologies  needed :D
savetheplanet PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 10 2011 at 1:51 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
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Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

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Sorry I have to laugh, I had this strange vision of astronauts floating inside your head when gravity reverses. :D
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 10 2011 at 11:35 am
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Thanks for the comment.

Haha, cool :)

savetheplanet PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 9 2011 at 6:33 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 564 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

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Your head is quite interesting :)  I actually wrote a poem before reading this that has the same idea, the world inside my head called "Limitless" but it hasn't been posted to the website yet.
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 27 2011 at 11:23 am
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Le Hannon, Dove, I am glad that you think so :)
A_shy_dove GOLD said...
on Jul. 27 2011 at 7:55 am
A_shy_dove GOLD, Hubli, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Never compare your life with others, as you have no idea what their journey is all about.

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The use of metaphors in this poem is really awesome. And I would like to say that "my head is the same except the fairytale things...." Very good poem. 
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 23 2011 at 8:50 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Very much so. It can be so hard to find other moon-lovers, as I think you have said once before.