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September 9, 2011
By PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
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PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Stay golden&quot;<br /> - Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

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Black wing snaps
Cracks
Still air
Sick and dry
With the heat of seven summers

Thick black sole
Taps out memory's tune
On gritty pavement dark with rain

Firefly
Waltzing through corn stalks
Doesn't mind a thin black cat
Who's lost

It's almost 4:00 here
Which means you must be asleep
By now

© Allison H., Vancouver, WA

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PaigeStreet PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 26 2011 at 1:00 am
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
47 articles 0 photos 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Stay golden&quot;<br /> - Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

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Thanks :D I'm all about the lovely and the mystical.
PaigeStreet PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 26 2011 at 12:58 am
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
47 articles 0 photos 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Stay golden&quot;<br /> - Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

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Atmosphere. Good word. Thank you :)
PhoenixCrossing GOLD said...
on Dec. 25 2011 at 11:15 pm
PhoenixCrossing GOLD, Tinley Park, Illinois
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This piece has a really mystical air and I like that. Great job with it. Again, very strong imagery.
sophza PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 29 2011 at 11:39 pm
sophza PLATINUM, Sacramento, California
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Wow, that's really vivid imagery! I got a clear feeling of the atomosphere.
LifesIllusion BRONZE said...
on Nov. 29 2011 at 5:35 pm
LifesIllusion BRONZE, Cicero, Indiana
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Totally random! But it is so good. Everything you wrote I can picture in my mind with such epic detail. Great Poem! 5/5 stars
leafy said...
on Nov. 19 2011 at 9:29 am
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Random? Slightly, but that's good. The flow? Amazing. Imagery? Excellent. And yah, the picture seems like it was made for this poem. 5/5
PaigeStreet PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 26 2011 at 11:42 pm
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
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&quot;Stay golden&quot;<br /> - Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

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Thank you. I was lucky to come across that picture, as it has everything to do with the poem. 
PaigeStreet PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 26 2011 at 11:40 pm
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
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&quot;Stay golden&quot;<br /> - Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

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Thank you- that certainly means more, coming from you!
Steph0804 GOLD said...
on Sep. 26 2011 at 11:37 pm
Steph0804 GOLD, Seoul, Other
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I really like the flow of this! The descriptions are vivid too.. Nice!
Branden Navedo SILVER said...
on Sep. 21 2011 at 7:15 pm
Branden Navedo SILVER, Oklahoma, Maryland
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I found this very interesting. The picture and the poem seem to have some sort of connection, at least to me... One of the most interesting I've read, honestly. 
CarrieAnn13 GOLD said...
on Sep. 14 2011 at 9:52 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
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Truly, this is really random.  But I like it!  I really have no criticism, so excellent work!