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the hated mirror girl.

December 30, 2011
By meals100 SILVER, Grafton, Massachusetts
meals100 SILVER, Grafton, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"never take life seriously. no one gets out alive anyways."


wake up, up, up.
feet touch ground.
upright now.
start walking towards door.

metal feels cold, cold, cold.
door knob turns.
door opens.
walk through door.

walk down the endless hallway, hallway, hallway.
feel for door.
open it.
walk in bathroom.

feet touch cold tiles, tiles, tiles.
clothes shed to the ground.
snake looses it's skin.
open the shower curtain.

shower head spurts cold water, water, water.
step in the freezing ice.
beginning to change to fire.
fire and ice: sizzle, crackle.

finally, waking up, up, up.
water coaxes me back to sleep.
with it's shhh.
water turns off.

towel swaddles my body, body, body.
time engulfs morning.
back in room.
barely awake.

look in the mirror, mirror, mirror.
girl staring back, hates me.
girl staring back, looks at her, with disgust.
I look at her with disgust.

the hated mirror girl, girl, girl.
only recently came by.
only visits in dark times.
why, then? why then?

sees herself in her mind, mind, mind.
looks at mirror.
sees compilations of people.
but not her.
no, not her.

where has she gone, gone, gone?
is she still in the shower, shower, shower?
is she still in her dreams, dreams, dreams?
is she lost forever, forever, forever?
trapped, trapped, trapped.
in forever, forever, forever.


The author's comments:
morning time, time, time. :)

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on Jan. 29 2012 at 4:20 pm
billgamesh11 BRONZE, Grafton, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"It's always darkest before the dawn." ~Florence and the Machine

Yeah! It does! It's so original! Plus, I can totally relate to it! That's really important when you write, to write it so that the reader understands your writing enough to be able to connect to it. When they are connected, they are interested, as am I!!! Great Job and Keep Writing!!! :):):);)

on Jan. 11 2012 at 6:04 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

I can kind of relate to this. I like how you used the repetition, it gives it an eerie feeling...4/5 =) the idea is good too

on Jan. 2 2012 at 4:10 pm
CaptainStar BRONZE, Estancia, New Mexico
2 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your limit is what you make it.

This is pretty cool. Very dark and depressing though it sounds like me sometimes. Keep up the good writing.

on Jan. 1 2012 at 3:32 pm
A.M.Blackwood BRONZE, Hobbiton, Utah
2 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"This is the type of arrant pedantry up with which I will not put."

Very interesting ideas and intriguing format, but a bit blunt. My suggestion: think more symbolically and less literally.

IzzyVT SILVER said...
on Jan. 1 2012 at 12:41 pm
IzzyVT SILVER, N. Ferrisburg, Vermont
6 articles 0 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;If the person you are talking to doesn&#039;t appear to be listening, be patient. It may simply be that he has a small piece of fluff in his ear.&rdquo; <br /> ― A.A. Milne, Winnie-the-Pooh

I love the repetition throughout the poem...it really adds to it.