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obivious...?

January 5, 2012
By Anonymous

The girl in front of you is dying slowly
not physically,but emotionally
an unnatural death-
sadly he isn't noticing.

But, she has a feeling that one day he will notice
Juat feels it,
She wants him to notice
She wants him to see his secret tricks swen on her
She will continue until he stops and stares...
Because she knows he will,
one day.

Everything seems controlled to her lately;
Food,
Water,
Walking,
Sunlight,
What has he done?
Or is it herself?

His dirty secrets and nervousness
are all pouring down on her,
shattering her heart
in pieces.

Day by day
he is letting her die faster
only he hasn't
sensed that, yet.

But why her?
The girl who has sacrificed everything for him,
The girl who has blindly loved him,
Always forgiving and forgetting
all his mistakes.

Is this ever going to stop?
Is violence the only answer?
Is hurting someone a good feeling?
Is it just to have some relief for an amount of time?

She lies there, all by herself,
Wishing she could figure it out.
That night, he finds out about
what has happened to his loved one.

He wishes to start all over the next day,
To feel better,
To get help for
his acts.

Too bad, she is already dead.



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on May. 29 2012 at 8:27 pm
missloveliee SILVER, Vienna, Virginia
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Thank you!! :)

 

 


on May. 29 2012 at 8:25 pm
starzforever GOLD, Sebring, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
being me is the greatest gift

is is a great poem

on Jan. 22 2012 at 2:24 pm
missloveliee SILVER, Vienna, Virginia
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Well...Thanks! :)

on Jan. 22 2012 at 2:23 pm
Plain-Jane ELITE, Grandview, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"And the Lamb at the center of the throne will be their Shepherd. He will guide them to springs of living water; and God will wipe away every tear from their eyes." Revelation 7:17

Though this is a sad poem the very last line made me laugh because of the irony. it was a good ending. some of the poem was cliqued though.

on Jan. 21 2012 at 6:54 pm
missloveliee SILVER, Vienna, Virginia
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Thank You!

on Jan. 21 2012 at 6:53 pm
missloveliee SILVER, Vienna, Virginia
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Sure why not. Thanks!

on Jan. 21 2012 at 6:51 pm
AlaskaGirl GOLD, Klawock, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
"Screw the shining armor. I will take my man in dirty camo any day"

I... I... I'm speechless. Amazing. :)

Shmelmo GOLD said...
on Jan. 21 2012 at 6:51 pm
Shmelmo GOLD, Elma, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
You never know how strong you are until being strong is the only choice you have.

Really deep and Sad. I can tell there is a lot of meaning in this poem. Nice Job! Could you check out my poem, Once a Survivor Forever a Fighter? Thanks!

on Jan. 21 2012 at 5:55 pm
missloveliee SILVER, Vienna, Virginia
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Thanks! :)

on Jan. 21 2012 at 5:43 pm
Belivehopedream, Brooklyn, New York
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Good job. I love the poem, very deep and i just idk i have no words good job :) keep on writing

on Jan. 15 2012 at 2:43 pm
missloveliee SILVER, Vienna, Virginia
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well,life goes on.....

on Jan. 15 2012 at 2:22 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;It&#039;s better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not.&quot;<br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> ~Luara Moncur

no problem its a very good poem!

on Jan. 15 2012 at 2:21 pm
recurring_resilience SILVER, Ashburn, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;These are the times that try men&#039;s souls.&quot; - Thomas Paine.<br /> <br /> &quot;You don&#039;t understand! I coulda had class. I coulda been a contender. I could&#039;ve been somebody, instead of a bum, which is what I am.&quot; - On the Water Front<br /> <br /> &quot;This is my place of failure.&quot;

So sad. Everyone gets hurt in an abusive relationship.

on Jan. 15 2012 at 2:20 pm
missloveliee SILVER, Vienna, Virginia
9 articles 2 photos 21 comments
Yes. Ther's a typo in the first line...Anyways thank u :)

on Jan. 15 2012 at 2:17 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;It&#039;s better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not.&quot;<br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> ~Luara Moncur

this is great...theres so many life stories like this...there is some typos but it great!!

on Jan. 13 2012 at 10:19 am
missloveliee SILVER, Vienna, Virginia
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Thank you ! :)

cookiestar said...
on Jan. 13 2012 at 10:17 am
Wow, I love this. This is amazing. Beautifully written. Good job!