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I love you, too.

January 6, 2012
By alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
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alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
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What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

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At the edge of the hospital bed
I feel a thousand miles away.
Can he hear me?
I hope he can hear me.
My heart ushers his eyes to open
Only to find stillness in return.
I want to paint his face
Put the color back in his once rosy cheeks.
Just yesterday that smile lit up the room.
Now the beep of his heart rate reminds me
To breath
To touch
To feel
I want to break the monitor.
Put a miracle in the rhythm
Of a heart that fails to keep beating.
The wires all over are holding him here
Giving me one last chance
To say goodbye.
If he can even hear me.
I pray to God he can hear me.
I find his hand under the sheets
I hold onto it for dear life.
My heart aches to feel the warmth
To feel the life that loved to live
To hear his laughter once again
And put it in my dreams for safe keeping.
Daddies are supposed to laugh.
Why can't I hear him one more time?
The memories stay as his soul leaves
I say the last words I want him to hear
Can he hear me?
I pray to God he can hear me.
His voice echoes in my head
"I love you, too."

© Kimberly C., Houston, TX

The author's comments:
My dad passed away last year and poetry has helped me cope. It's my heart spilled out into words. It feels amazing.
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Beaniebaby123 PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 17 2013 at 6:20 pm
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im so sorry about your dad...i really thought your poem was great. It helped me cope with my own loss.
dolphincrazy226 BRONZE said...
on Sep. 11 2012 at 5:39 pm
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First off, I'm sorry for your loss. Second, great poem.  The imagery is impeccable and it makes one wonder who the poem is about.  you answer by creating the image of your father bit by bit, instead of all at once.  that gradual description is perfect for this poem.  And i love your happy ending, too.  a perfect blend of emotions of the narraotr and imagery
Sabee said...
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This is one my favourite article...i love it..i felt a lot when reading this..thank u so much muzee
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on Feb. 17 2012 at 7:15 am
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it very beautiful and i love it!!!!!!
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on Feb. 10 2012 at 5:50 pm
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I feel the same way about my mom this was a GREAT poem good job and keep up the good work....And he heard you the answer comes in many ways !
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND said...
on Feb. 1 2012 at 2:26 pm
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I know he heard you. My mom was once very very siick its actually a miracle she lived...she was in a coma for 5 days and i thought she couldnt hear me but she did! I know he heard you and i know he said it back in his heart and! Very emotional and touching.
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i like the paint his face line. its very moving.
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I believe that he heard you and still can. Lv ur work!
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thats really touching...i have had a lot of family die and i hve never worte about it like this i love it i really do!!
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It was really sweet! I won't critique structure or anything, because I don't think that is what you cared about when you wrote this, but it was really good as far as content :)
alligator6 SILVER said...
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He had a stroke.
Jules5600 said...
on Jan. 17 2012 at 5:18 pm
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I love you poem! It is so seroius and interesting. I am so sorry that your dad died. What did he die from?
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on Jan. 16 2012 at 4:23 pm
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This is very well written, and it's good you're using creativity to help you cope and get through this. It's amazing that you can share something so personal. Wonderful poem.
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Nice write, touching sad, I like the emotional feelings !
cookiestar said...
on Jan. 16 2012 at 12:04 am
this is beautiful and emotional. I love the way its written:). Good job!
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Nice Poem. :)
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its a great poem almost made me cry i love the way you use the words very strong feelings in this poem
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Poetry is very hard to write. This is one of the few poems that made me emotional! Veryyy good!
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Oh my gosh, I was reading this and a movie instantly begun to play in my head...your poem is very easy to visualize - that's a good quality. Great job!