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The Goddess's Creations

May 25, 2012
By readaholic PLATINUM, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
readaholic PLATINUM, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
I&#039;d rather fail because I fell on my own face than fall because someone tripped me up<br /> ~Jhonen Vasquez


The Goddess of the Universe,
after filling her solitary creation-
the Earth, her only child-
with plants of good fruit
and beasts, with their terrible beautiful ways,
was not happy.

These creations could not look upon her
and thank her for the gift of life,
they were not self-aware,
they had no free will

So,
carving her own godly, celestial form
into blood, flesh, and bone,
she gave her final creation
true life--a mind for thinking,
and a heart for loving.

And for a while, all was happy.

These creations adored their creator,
believing wholeheartedly in she who had made them be,
and the Goddess smiled, love in her gaze,
on her perfect, heavenly creation.

Then the Goddess saw a new being
rise among her precious babies:
Greed and Selfishness, hand in hand,
caused the humans to separate
with walls of empty, meaningless money,
and from the borders rose Hate

which rose into War

And the Goddess, she felt each blow,
as each fallen human was a broken piece of her soul,
and watched helplessly
as the humans pursued Greed,
fell to Selfishness,
and gave their lives to Hate and War,
they no longer cared for their Goddess.

The Goddess could not destroy her creations,
and simply tried to brush off
the false gods devouring her world.
Instead, the humans leaped onto her,
disrupting her body of planets and stars,
seeking to conquer the Goddess herself.

The Goddess is fallen,
their people walk over her,
just another frontier to overtake
and fill with their ungodly filth.
The Goddess cried for her broken heart,
torn by the humans incapable of love,
though that is all she ever had for them.


The author's comments:
Tell me what you think about this. Obviously, it's a metaphor of the world as I see it. Do you agree? Disagree? Just want to spam my stuff? Whatever, just tell me what you think.

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on May. 7 2013 at 6:52 pm
readaholic PLATINUM, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
I&#039;d rather fail because I fell on my own face than fall because someone tripped me up<br /> ~Jhonen Vasquez

THANK YOU SO MUCH!!! :D

on May. 6 2013 at 11:45 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Hey there, I really need to come here more often for a look at your work. The title really caught my attention, I was not expecting this to be about present day, I thought it would be set in Grecian time. So, that is really cool that you changed it up. I love the slight mood changes through out the poem that really build up at the end. Your word choices are well chosen and this was written very well. It made me sad to see how the Goddess's mood changes, she is happy and proud and her mood just goes down so sadly. I was a bit angry with the people and then I began to think, this is us. The is Earth. We all do need to change. And once we are changed we need to help the others who haven't yet. I like the line 'was a broken piece of her soul...'! I thought that was brilliant and very powerful. You could not change anything to make this any better. And I do agree with you, as I said before I think there needs to be some serious change. Greed is beginning to overpower generosity. GOOD job!

on May. 2 2013 at 6:50 pm
readaholic PLATINUM, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
27 articles 0 photos 425 comments

Favorite Quote:
I&#039;d rather fail because I fell on my own face than fall because someone tripped me up<br /> ~Jhonen Vasquez

Really?  Thank you!

on May. 1 2013 at 10:29 pm
Carpe-Caffeam GOLD, No Where, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;If it weren&rsquo;t for the coffee, I&rsquo;d have no identifiable personality whatsoever.&rdquo; &ndash;David Letterman

I love how you personified ideas/thoughts such as Greed and Selfishness! This was well-written. I can find no fault in this piece.