I pretty much agree with Tiwaz. "bite" does not agree with the adjective "clean."

Perhaps you meant to say "thrash" instead of "trash"?

Also, if this is legitly about cannibalism (which is the only thing I think it could be about), "candy" makes me think that this is something metaphorical. Cannibalism is an interesting subject, but not something I would see as the basis for 2 poems by the same person.

I would also like to see a break into 2 (or even 3) stanzas somewhere.

And I would write the last 2 lines "My cannibal hunger/ will eat you alive."

I don't care which poems of mine you look at, as long as you get "surrounded by Nature and You will See . . ." in the forums (it's the one I need the most help on).

First of all, this is a wonderful poem and I love its simplicity, but I've just got a couple suggestions. I'm gonna go ahead and apologize for going on and on.

In the 2nd line, I don't really like the word "bite", because it puts this goofy image in my head of someone doing a Pac-Man motion on a dog bone. I know the alliteration is nice, but I would suggest another word, maybe "lick", "gnaw", or "chew"

Secondly, instead of "you won't succeed", how about telling what they won't succeed in doing (ex: "you won't escape", "you won't outsmart me", "you won't steal the Congressman's shoes and elope to Costa Rica with twenty Party City employees and a Yorkie")?