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Wonderland

November 13, 2012
By OneEye21 SILVER, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
OneEye21 SILVER, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
6 articles 3 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
I will love you no matter what you do or say. I could die anytime, not tomorrow but today.


Everything about you I loved.
How quietly your rabbit hole drank my curiosity.
Your little door of wonders, how it had intrigued me.
Your illusive key, how it kept my mind taunt with frustration.
How your luminous floors caught my tears, until my shoes were flooded.
How titillating your garden of beauties was to my sense of life.
How your ostentatious cat, that disappearing creature, rattled my reason.
How your deck painting roses forced me to meet your horrid queen.
How that foul game of croquet made me think you as bizarre.
Your white rabbit, how he blew his horn of accusations at the start of court.
How you knew my innocence yet still convicted me.
How I stood up and defended myself against your self-centered events.
And how I awoke from your lucid dream of imagination,
How I have longed to dive back into your glorious world.
Everything about you I loved entirely.


The author's comments:
Our school play this fall was Alice in Wonderland. Being a fan of the classic written by Lewis Carroll I decided to write this.

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on Nov. 28 2012 at 2:57 pm
BreeChase BRONZE, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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Love your repitition!

on Nov. 28 2012 at 2:54 pm
CorySchoonover BRONZE, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;You miss 100% of the oppurtunities you don&#039;t take&quot;<br /> &quot;Even if you fall on your face, atleast you&#039;re moving forward&quot;

I love the repitition of "How", I also like your word choice.

on Nov. 28 2012 at 2:33 pm
TraceBatWingsAndBrokenStrings DIAMOND, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;This gun has stopped time in its tracks, has altered the course of our fate. Destiny is shattered and timeless. Closed eyes feel the cold winds embrace.&quot;<br /> -Avenged Sevenfold

There are some very stimulating lines in this piece, like "How quietyly your rabbit hole drank my curiosity." And "Your little door of wonders, how it had me intrigued." The repitition of the "How" at the the beginning of every new line also adds to the poetic effect. Nice work.

on Nov. 28 2012 at 9:10 am
CoreyBates BRONZE, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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Nice OneEye, saying everything referring to the play and everything. This piece really grabbed my attention cause it is just that awesome.