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The Game

January 8, 2013
By nightrunner23 PLATINUM, Greene, New York
nightrunner23 PLATINUM, Greene, New York
33 articles 0 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you treat me like a princess, I&#039;ll treat you like a prince.<br /> If you treat me like a game, I&#039;ll show you how it&#039;s played.


Winner, winner,
Pick your prize.
Which one of the people
You love dies?
Take a moment,
Think it out ,
Make sure there isn't
A single doubt.
Look at faces,
Think of names.
This is what you get
for playing games.
Dive into the recesses
Of your mind.
We both know
What you'll find.

Is it your father,
A brother, or friend?
Which of their lives
Must come to an end?
Is it your mother,
Your sister, Your lover?
I hope you're ready
to get rid of her.

Is it a cousin,
A niece, A nephew?
Come now, child,
Tell me, who?
Is it someone else
That you can't wait to admit?
Because the quicker you answer
The quicker you forget



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on Feb. 13 2013 at 9:31 pm
WriterWannaBe PLATINUM, Somers Point, New Jersey
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With a little work, I think this could be really great. I liked the rhyming, but I think you should either have it continuous throughout or not at all. That's what made it feel a little choppy. I would've liked a little back story too as to what "the game" is. Other than that, it's really intriguing and I really liked it! Keep writing (=

on Jan. 15 2013 at 6:22 pm
shinegirl24 BRONZE, Grand Rapids, Michigan
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&quot;All, everything I understand, I understand only because I love.&quot; Leo Tolstoy

hi! I liked your poem a lot. One thing I'd say to work on is the meter, your words definitely rhymed well but at times the beat seemed a bit off. Just adding more syllables or taking some away from specific lines might make it flow better. But good job!

on Jan. 15 2013 at 3:55 pm
nightrunner23 PLATINUM, Greene, New York
33 articles 0 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you treat me like a princess, I&#039;ll treat you like a prince.<br /> If you treat me like a game, I&#039;ll show you how it&#039;s played.

Thanks a lot. <period>  I'll take your advice. <period>  jk, everyone's a comidian  

on Jan. 15 2013 at 3:34 pm
AWriter101 SILVER, Rockton, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
being single doesn&#039;t mean you are week it means that you are strong enough to wait for what you deserve! -Niall Horan

I am not sure of the theme of this or plot but  I like the rhymes!  

on Jan. 15 2013 at 3:32 pm
Sakuya PLATINUM, Richmond, Virginia
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I saw your post on Ink Chat. I think that this is really interesting and your punctuation is on except for you only include question marks and commas but no periods which could add another dramatic effect. I like the rhyming even if you don't need it for a free verse unless you wish to. Feel free to check out my own work as well I'm not very good at poetry though.