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February 24, 2013
By jonpettigrew SILVER, Oak Ridge, Tennessee
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your eyes are grey like ash
still warm from a fire
they pierce right through me
leaving me breathless and confused
exhausted
i can't resist you
i want you to lead me
in the dark
wherever you go
i will follow
you have no mercy
together we have no
regrets
I ve given you everything
everything i have left
please sever me off
make me forget....yes

© Katie P., Bethesda, MD

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migwam ELITE said...
on Apr. 22 2013 at 3:01 pm
migwam ELITE, Tumwater, Washington
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"Never let the future disturb you. You will meet it, if you have to, with the same weapons of reason which today arm you against the present." --Marcus Aurelius

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Wow. The intensity of this simple poem reveals the emotion behind it. I love the comparisons you make- far from cliche. You have a great style, and I genuinely hope to see more from you!
SarahGrac3 said...
on Apr. 16 2013 at 7:15 pm
SarahGrac3, Rockford, Michigan
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I loved this! It had so much meaning which was really impressive. I don't have any critiques.
Mckay ELITE said...
on Apr. 6 2013 at 2:43 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

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I'm glad you like her work. What's your faovrite Kay Ryan poem?
jonpettigrew SILVER said...
on Apr. 5 2013 at 12:16 pm
jonpettigrew SILVER, Oak Ridge, Tennessee
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i meant she lol
jonpettigrew SILVER said...
on Apr. 5 2013 at 12:13 pm
jonpettigrew SILVER, Oak Ridge, Tennessee
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thanks for suggesting him, He's now one of my favorite poets
SarClark BRONZE said...
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It's hard sometimes to write meaningful, short freeverse, but I really really liked your lines (especially the first two ~) and I liked the ending. Some of the wording was a little bit confusing but I think it sort of actually fits with your style of writing! Excellent job.
TaylorWintry DIAMOND said...
on Mar. 31 2013 at 10:55 am
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
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Wonderful! I ADORE the first two lines!! The ending was a bit of a twist, but I liked it! Continue to write as wonderfully as you do! BTW, these would make fantastic song lyrics.
Helena_Noel BRONZE said...
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Beautiful and enrapturing.
Mckay ELITE said...
on Mar. 17 2013 at 10:35 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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You have Kay Ryan's simple yet sophisticated style. Can't wait for your future works. Do continue to write more stuff like this. Check out Kay Ryan's work to see what I mean if you don't know what I'm talking about. P.S She's last year's Pulitzer Prize winner for poetry (I think).
Jade.I.Am ELITE said...
on Mar. 13 2013 at 10:49 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
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This is so sad! I loved your imagery and your lack of capitalization, very clever :P