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Underneath

May 26, 2014
By MalaikaJ GOLD, Cloquet, Minnesota
MalaikaJ GOLD, Cloquet, Minnesota
19 articles 2 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
I love writing. I love the swirl and swing of words as they tangle with human emotions. - James Michener


The lovely casing,
so carefully applied,
is coming off.
Ruffles and lacing,
hiding that she lied;
uncomfortable cough.

Covered in designs,
meant to catch your eye,
it disappeared.
Dirty looks were signs,
She was very sly,
anger appeared.

Underneath is black,
sorrow, hurt and pain;
bitterness concealed.
She tries to put it back,
to hide that stain:
hatred revealed.



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on Oct. 24 2014 at 5:46 pm
Angelique_h GOLD, Bradenton, Florida
11 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We cry, not because we are weak, but because we have been strong for too long."

This poem is really creative and I like how the short sentence structure makes it more dramatic.

MalaikaJ GOLD said...
on Aug. 8 2014 at 10:38 pm
MalaikaJ GOLD, Cloquet, Minnesota
19 articles 2 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
I love writing. I love the swirl and swing of words as they tangle with human emotions. - James Michener

I'm glad you understood it, I was trying to figure out how to make it less confusing.

on Aug. 7 2014 at 11:08 pm
___averylynn_____ SILVER, Waterford, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
Look closely at the present you are constructing. It should look like the future you are dreaming. - Alice Walker.<br /> What you wear is your billboard. So, what are you advertising?

I don't know why people don't understand.  I got it.  Right off the bat.  From the title, even.  I know that casing.  I used to wear it alot.  An inch deep of makeup.  It makes sense.  Everyone wants to hide thier pain and flaws somehow.  We all hide behind some barriers. 

--Em-- GOLD said...
on Aug. 7 2014 at 9:14 am
--Em-- GOLD, Grand Rapids, Michigan
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i'm a little bit confused, and i am still trying to figure it out, but i really like this poem because it is not a surfacey poem, you have to think about it. great job

MalaikaJ GOLD said...
on Jun. 4 2014 at 9:33 am
MalaikaJ GOLD, Cloquet, Minnesota
19 articles 2 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
I love writing. I love the swirl and swing of words as they tangle with human emotions. - James Michener

The casing is the fake self she shows to the world like her make-up and how she acts. Sorry it was confusing and thanks for the comment!

on Jun. 3 2014 at 11:01 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;If you&#039;re losing your soul and you know it, then you&#039;ve still got a soul left to lose&rdquo; <br /> ― Charles Bukowski

Alright - I'm not smart enough to figure this out, but I do know that I like it. If you could explain it a little bit.....like, "the lovely casing" - casing of what? Sorry, a little slow today :P However, I do like your word choice here ("ruffles and lacing" is such pretty imagery), and the emotion behind it is great. 5/5 :)

on Jun. 3 2014 at 5:16 pm
Luv4Ever SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
7 articles 0 photos 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
A miracle is just another name for hard work<br /> -Minho in &quot;To The Beautiful You&quot;

it wasn't the most amazing piece i've ever seen but i enjoyed it^^