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Same?

December 16, 2014
By gabe9521 BRONZE, Mora, New Mexico
gabe9521 BRONZE, Mora, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
The pressure makes us stronger, the struggle makes us hunger, the hard lessons make the difference, and the difference makes it worth it.


Every day is the same. I wake I dress I go to school like the rest. It all just seems the same, it just makes things incredibly lame. That is why I try my best to be unique even though I may seem mystique.


The author's comments:

I just felt like writing it nothing really inspired me, I just felt like sharing it nothing really stands out but I don't see how it hurts if I post it. (Wrote it a couple of years ago)


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on Jul. 25 2015 at 6:20 pm
NymeriaWaters PLATINUM, Holland, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"We are all Worms, but I do believe I'm a glow worm"- Winston Churchill

I really like the idea for this poem. Adding more verses would bring out the theme more, especially if the verses were all about practically the same thing. This poem definitely has potential to be really interesting.

on Jul. 24 2015 at 1:53 pm
gabe9521 BRONZE, Mora, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
The pressure makes us stronger, the struggle makes us hunger, the hard lessons make the difference, and the difference makes it worth it.

Will do. Thank you

on Jul. 23 2015 at 10:50 am
SomeoneMagical PLATINUM, Durham, New Hampshire
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I liked your use of ryhmes and similes and how the speaker is describing that his/her day is The same. This is a very original piece of writing. But I would suggest maybe making it longer...and adding a few more details. It was a little drab and plain and I couldn't quite get any pictures...please add more descriptive words and sentences. Other than that I think this is a pretty good quality piece.

Jc543 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 18 2015 at 2:56 pm
Jc543 BRONZE, Bronx, NY, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Nearly all men can stand adversity, but if you want to test a man's character, give him power."

To start, I feel that you should add more to this poem. The tone that is set in this stanza suggests a personal and emotionally based narrative. You could build off that concept and establish a theme that revolves around identity. To be honest I don't know much about poems, but I feel there is more to be explored in this piece. The poem has a solid start by establishing how monotonous life is, but it could be even stronger by expanding on that idea in a more creative way.