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Independence Day

February 18, 2015
By --Em-- GOLD, Grand Rapids, Michigan
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I weep for the stars,

So quickly forgotten

In the presence of

Majestic, booming

Fireworks.

© Kevan B., Beaverton, OR

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JRaye PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 28 2015 at 2:04 pm
JRaye PLATINUM, Dorr, Michigan
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&quot;If you build your house far enough away from Trouble, then Trouble will never find you.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Have you ever looked fear in the face and said, &#039;I just don&#039;t care.&#039;?&quot;

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I like this a lot :) To me it seems like a metaphor, for legendary people of the past being blocked out by today's celebrities. I do think you could have not put those spaces between the lines, and maybe lower-cased "so", "in", "majestic" and "fireworks", give it a sense of being a broken up sentence, if that makes sense? Either way, I love the idea behind this, it's really unique and beautiful. (Unless you literally prefer stars over fireworks, in which case same! They're much quieter! :))