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January 21, 2009
By kirabonk GOLD, Romeoville, Illinois
kirabonk GOLD, Romeoville, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 7 comments

The setting sun paints cozy rectangles
Across the floor where I sit,
The temperature tugging my eyelids.
As I lie down, swiftly succumbing,
Your words are my lullaby.



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kirabonk GOLD said...
on May. 31 2011 at 2:12 pm
kirabonk GOLD, Romeoville, Illinois
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Thank you for your comment (even though I am replying two years later). I hope all is well!

kirabonk GOLD said...
on May. 31 2011 at 2:11 pm
kirabonk GOLD, Romeoville, Illinois
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Thank you, Zero- I agree, the picture fits.

kirabonk GOLD said...
on May. 31 2011 at 2:10 pm
kirabonk GOLD, Romeoville, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 7 comments
Thanks for your comment, I like how you described the order of the poem.

kirabonk GOLD said...
on May. 31 2011 at 2:10 pm
kirabonk GOLD, Romeoville, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Thank you- I love the dog picture, too!

 


kirabonk GOLD said...
on May. 31 2011 at 2:09 pm
kirabonk GOLD, Romeoville, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 7 comments
Thank you!

kirabonk GOLD said...
on May. 31 2011 at 2:09 pm
kirabonk GOLD, Romeoville, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 7 comments
Thank you so much, I appreciate it!

spency SILVER said...
on May. 27 2011 at 10:37 am
spency SILVER, Irvington, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 75 comments

Favorite Quote:
"DON'T GIVE UP,REACH YOURSELF UP"

nice poem....rated u 5/5....good job.....am loving it......

reblep GOLD said...
on May. 16 2011 at 8:55 pm
reblep GOLD, Chester, Connecticut
11 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
the sun through my window, warming my skin...

brief but full of detail. you tell so much without saying a lot at all. 

on May. 5 2011 at 7:40 am
hdeneen26 BRONZE, Atglen, Pennsylvania
3 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
Country music is three chords and the thruth.

Nicee poem! The picture of a dog sleeping added to it makes it that much more adorable and great! Great job! :-)

on Jan. 31 2010 at 9:49 am
rainbowwriter SILVER, Teaneck, New Jersey
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It's very interesting. I love how the main writting part is about the scenery and then the last words are the story. Very well done!

Zero_K DIAMOND said...
on Nov. 15 2009 at 5:52 pm
Zero_K DIAMOND, Moosic, Pennsylvania
83 articles 0 photos 435 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's no fun if you're not insane, otherwise you grow up to be an accountant." -Moi

Cute! The picture is perfect for this poem!

-Blessed Be!

+++ZERO+++

SaraB. GOLD said...
on Jul. 8 2009 at 2:18 pm
SaraB. GOLD, Phoenix, Arizona
12 articles 6 photos 215 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Whatever you are, be a good one" Abraham Lincoln

I like how you managed to depict the whole situation in so few words. Congratulations on getting published!