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When 'Us' Begins.

May 3, 2012
By Rebecca.xx BRONZE, Springboro, Ohio
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Rebecca.xx BRONZE, Springboro, Ohio
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&quot;I became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity.&quot;<br /> -Edgar Allan Poe<br /> (this summarizes my life)

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Hopelessly in love,
Waiting for that one moment,
Where you love me too.

When we stop being-
Friends, friends, nothing but friends yet-
When you and I become 'us.'

When will that day come?
I have no earthly idea.
But until that day--

I'll laugh at your jokes,
Smile when you are teasing,
And just wait for 'us.'

© Belinda H., Palm Harbor, FL

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Us. It has a stronger definition than you may realize.
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Rebecca.xx BRONZE said...
on May. 27 2013 at 10:43 am
Rebecca.xx BRONZE, Springboro, Ohio
4 articles 3 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity.&quot;<br /> -Edgar Allan Poe<br /> (this summarizes my life)

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Wow, thank you so much! It really means a lot to get praise from such a wonderful author as you are (I've read and loved your work!). I'm glad you perceived the idea that perhaps e love could not work on this lifetime, on this earth, but only in heaven and the stars. Thank you so much!
ephemeral GOLD said...
on May. 27 2013 at 12:21 am
ephemeral GOLD, Park City, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;All that is gold does not glitter/Not all those who wander are lost/The old that is strong does not wither/Deep roots are not reached by the frost&quot;

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This is so sweet, and like other comments said, relatable. You might consider getting rid of the apostrophes around us, so that it doesn't have to be a fake abstract idea and become a real thing you're talking about, nor does it have to cause break in the flow of your line. It's dreamy how you wrote "earthly" specifically for your clue about your future together, implying that perhaps on a level of heaven, your soul does know and is also quietly waiting with you because you both unconsciously know that someday it will happen. This piece is so endearing, and I like its subtle longing
Rebecca.xx BRONZE said...
on May. 22 2013 at 8:53 pm
Rebecca.xx BRONZE, Springboro, Ohio
4 articles 3 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity.&quot;<br /> -Edgar Allan Poe<br /> (this summarizes my life)

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That's fine, I appreciate your positive encouragement!
Rebecca.xx BRONZE said...
on May. 22 2013 at 8:52 pm
Rebecca.xx BRONZE, Springboro, Ohio
4 articles 3 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity.&quot;<br /> -Edgar Allan Poe<br /> (this summarizes my life)

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Thank you so much! I've actually been told my writing is horrific recently, and I nearly gave it up. Comments like this help keep me motivated to continue despite hate!
Metalhead08 GOLD said...
on May. 21 2013 at 10:02 pm
Metalhead08 GOLD, Port Republic, Maryland
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&quot;I&#039;d rather hate you for everything you are. Than ever love you for something you are not. &quot; FFDP &quot;You&#039;re born alone and you die alone&quot; FFDP &quot;I wonder out where you can&#039;t see, inside my shell I wait and bleed.&quot; Slipknot &quot; If youre 555 then I am 666&quot;

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This is so relatable for me as a reader! It defiantly hooked me in, as a fish on a hook. Job well done! You have great talents!
shadowkiss96 SILVER said...
on May. 21 2013 at 8:33 pm
shadowkiss96 SILVER, Selkirk, New York
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&quot;You know you&#039;re in love when you can&#039;t fall asleep because reality is finally better than your dreams.&quot;

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It's a pretty poem... Sorry I can't really provide you with more feedback, im not to great with haiku's
Rebecca.xx BRONZE said...
on May. 21 2013 at 7:55 pm
Rebecca.xx BRONZE, Springboro, Ohio
4 articles 3 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity.&quot;<br /> -Edgar Allan Poe<br /> (this summarizes my life)

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I actually didn't mean to write this one on haiku format- the stanzas just happened to flow that way!
Wings10FeetTall GOLD said...
on May. 21 2013 at 7:47 am
Wings10FeetTall GOLD, Myrtle Beach, South Carolina
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May your words be sharp.<br /> - Christopher Paolini<br /> <br /> <br /> Nobody&#039;s going to wait for you, so do it now.<br /> -Ingrid Michaelson<br /> <br /> <br /> Broken hearts heal, but never the same.<br /> - Jessica Romo<br /> <br /> Idiots rely on luck.<br /> -Sherlock Holmes

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This is another amazing haiku!
Rebecca.xx BRONZE said...
on May. 21 2013 at 5:39 am
Rebecca.xx BRONZE, Springboro, Ohio
4 articles 3 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity.&quot;<br /> -Edgar Allan Poe<br /> (this summarizes my life)

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Awesome, I'm glad you liked it and could relate! Thank you for reading :)
Rebecca.xx BRONZE said...
on May. 21 2013 at 5:39 am
Rebecca.xx BRONZE, Springboro, Ohio
4 articles 3 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity.&quot;<br /> -Edgar Allan Poe<br /> (this summarizes my life)

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Thank you! I love the picture as well, I was so excited when I found it.
Rebecca.xx BRONZE said...
on May. 21 2013 at 5:37 am
Rebecca.xx BRONZE, Springboro, Ohio
4 articles 3 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity.&quot;<br /> -Edgar Allan Poe<br /> (this summarizes my life)

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Thanks so much!
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM said...
on May. 20 2013 at 10:52 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

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&quot;Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light&quot; --Dylan Thomas

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This is great: soo sweet! I love it <3 Keep rockin
iDani-iBeauty SILVER said...
on May. 20 2013 at 7:36 pm
iDani-iBeauty SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
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- Failure Is Only The Opportunity To Begin Again, Only This Time More Wisely<br /> - Henry Ford -

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- Good Job ! It Was Short Sweet And To The Point . It Was Very Relatable And I Love The  Title And Picture !  Feedback Needed Please ! :)
ChocolateLove SILVER said...
on May. 20 2013 at 10:52 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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Simple, beautiful and easy to relate to. I love it!!! :D