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Idle autumn’s Day

September 29, 2014
By RohanKhan SILVER, Plano, Texas
RohanKhan SILVER, Plano, Texas
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Idle autumn’s Day
An idle bower harbors the Warbler,
As mellow mizzle dampens the understory.
Sharpened soil frosted dark and dewy,
Sentinel he perches atop an accented gully.

And staunch, with breast distended wholly
Crooned a rotund berceuse, sprit churning softly,
Fluting his sonorous acapella freely.

Then with a sharp emanation of his reed,
And with direct lead from his bayoneting beak,
He falls upon the idle arachnid.
Laden and drunken by its mellow mead,
Bower’d beneath a bud of moly.


The author's comments:

Karma, what goes around comes around, life isn't fair, what is comely may be sinister, whatever.


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on Oct. 26 2014 at 6:20 pm
bruisedmemories ELITE, Birdsboro, Pennsylvania
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&quot;When you&#039;re young, you can fly, but we trip on clouds &#039;cause we get too high&quot; -The Band Perry (Song: Don&#039;t Let Me Be Lonely)<br /> &quot;Cause no matter what, you&#039;ll never be alone&quot; -Lady Antebellum (Song: Compass)

I absolutely love this! The idea and message in the poem is amazing. Your word choice is very descriptive, however at some points it seems too descriptive. Using too many intellectual/out-of-this-world words may sometimes steer your poem away from its main purpose. Other than that, it's astonishing. Well done! Rated 5/5

on Oct. 13 2014 at 6:48 am
XxSmilesxX GOLD, Thomasville, Georgia
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The word choice is astonishing and amazing nice job