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June 21, 2011
By IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

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Life is like a compact mirror.
When you travel to Heaven's door,
It is where Saint Peter would peek,
To see what you did every week,
To see what you did every day,
To hear everything you did say,
What you thought of every minute
And if you deserve Heaven's heat.
Life may be a mirror so small,
But it is bigger than the mall.
If you know what it might reflect,
You might tell yourself "what the heck"
Now, be nice - do not say "you suck"
Because life can really do suck

© Marissa M., Rockford, MI

The author's comments:
This piece is written actually for a Teen Ink forum contest where a contestant needs to use the words given. I chose mirror but instead of submitting it to the contest forum, I submitted it here in Teen Ink.
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IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 6 2011 at 7:42 pm
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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Favorite Quote:
‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

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No need to worry, girl. And I actually need to thank you... :) 
Love.Hate.Passion. said...
on Aug. 6 2011 at 2:09 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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~Hope. Faith. Love~<br /> ~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~<br /> ~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than<br /> a distant memory.~

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The poem is very weak at the end , but very strong in the beginning. There's a small grammatical error at the end. It's supposed to say " because life can really suck" Otherwise , it would be grammatically incorrect. I felt as if the line " But it is bigger than the mall" was a bit amateur and didn't help the flow of the poem. It's a nice poem nevertheless.

 

I apologize if I hurt your feelings , as I am only trying to improve your writing by showing you want you can work on.

-Yessenia

Emily.L GOLD said...
on Aug. 2 2011 at 4:07 pm
Emily.L GOLD, Gilbert, Arizona
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I liked "Life may be a mirror so small." I didn't like the last 3 lines that much, but the rest of the poem was really good :)
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 2 2011 at 5:29 am
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&lrm;&quot;I&rsquo;m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don&rsquo;t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world.&quot; - Beyonc&eacute;

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Thanks... Glad you like it. When I re-read this. I didn't see the grammatical mistakes. Can you please specify? :)
Healing_Angel SILVER said...
on Aug. 1 2011 at 7:31 pm
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Have faith in yourself! Apart from a few small grammar mistakes, this was good! :) I liked it... :)
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 17 2011 at 2:12 am
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&lrm;&quot;I&rsquo;m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don&rsquo;t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world.&quot; - Beyonc&eacute;

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Huh? What you mean? And what did you find in the middle and beginning that was gone with the ending? It might help :)
TheHangingGirl BRONZE said...
on Jul. 16 2011 at 11:02 pm
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Im not big on the ending, but i really liked the beginning and the middle. :)