Good but some constructive critisism. You do need to fix up some third and first person tenses. Like when you are talking about your pen you say her but when you talk about it you say it is yourself. Check the last line, it doesn't quite have the same rhythm as the other lines, you might want to shuffle some the words around. Some of the other lines aswell don't have the same rhythm, read it aloud it might help. Have a think about the title aswell. Maybe try something like 'Hell in English' or something. 

Overall very good, and i'm just trying to be constructive and not trying to be mean.