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I just want to be friends

September 16, 2015
By marie2015 BRONZE, Hartford, Indiana
marie2015 BRONZE, Hartford, Indiana
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we first met at school

he told me he liked my long hair

i told him i liked his shirt

thats where it all started

that same day he asked me out

i told him i don't know

i just want to be friends

or maybe if you come over 

at 4 after school we can hang out 

lets get to know each other more 

well it was 4 

i waited an waited

knock knock 

hes here there it is 

i opened the door 

i told him lets be friends please 

and thats it we was friends for ever



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on Sep. 21 2015 at 8:51 am
KayeIsWriting SILVER, Oxford, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
"The only thing we have to fear is fear itself!" - Franklin Roosevelt

Your grammar could be better, you could have added a bit more detail, and there could have been more of a magic to this story. Other than that, I love your idea of something thats so opposite of what media, movies, and books present: the girl falls for the guy who's her best friend and who was always in love with her from the start. It was a great start and brainstorm. I think I would like to see maybe a revised, more vivid version of this. This seemed to be more of an outline than the final draft. What I do, is I like to write mine down on paper and pencil a few times, look it over, then copy what I've got onto the website.