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the rose.

February 14, 2010
By ToWriteLovee BRONZE, Andover, Kansas
ToWriteLovee BRONZE, Andover, Kansas
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The rain pelted her face, her tears ran with it down her drenched body. She took that first step, that step to recovery. The street was dark, the only light was the dim glow of the street post, cars zoomed past her on either side, like a comet flying through the sky. She takes another step, tears flowing as she felt her skin tighten against the bruises and scars that marked her twig of a body. She fell to the ground, the memories surrounding her like a demon of her past, she lay there in the middle of the street until the rain fell dry, memories swarming her, leaving her to wither up and die, the rose that was touched.


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just something i came up with, criticism is wanted(:

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Sarbear GOLD said...
on Feb. 25 2010 at 4:13 pm
Sarbear GOLD, Milan, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
--Before you criticize someone, you should walk a mile in their shoes. That way, when you criticize them, you&#039;re a mile away from them and you have their shoes.<br /> --When life gives you lemons, squirt them in people&#039;s eyes.

I'm giving this 5 stars because it's really deep and it made me think!! i really liked it and I hope you check out my poems, too!