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fear is an unwelcome friend

December 20, 2011
By Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
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I pray for the day, when fear himself will no longer follow me.
For the day it does not, will be the day I shall surely live like no other!
I will loveth thee as a summer's day.
I will jump off a cliff of life, and not once glance downward.
I will run as fast as a fierce cheetah; and be as strong as a roaring lion.
For I shall contain fear not, nor have doubt in my running veins.
I will smile again, my dear friend! I will surely smile!
I do not fool you, when I say fear is an unwelcome friend. For this surely is no lie.



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on Jul. 20 2012 at 5:04 am
thatunknownthing DIAMOND, Dubai, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery, but today is a gift; that's why they call it the present"

your comments on my poem were encouraging, thankyou, but i'm not sure if you've offered honest criticism. anyway this is what i think of your work: beautiful poem, conveys a constructive message relatable to everyone. the last line, however just seems to be too flat an ending, that can be improved upon. but a crisp, interesting piece.

on Jul. 11 2012 at 5:15 pm
Apollo77 PLATINUM, Brunswick, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;All you have to do is write one true sentence. Write the truest sentence that you know.&rdquo;<br /> &quot;Madame, all stories, if continued far enough, end in death, and he is no true-story teller who would keep that from you.&quot;<br /> -Ernest Hemingway

I like the creativity of this poem and i love the language you use to pull it off. The descriptions are really great, but i do agree that sometimes the old language can be confusing...really cool and i love your writing style!

on Jun. 1 2012 at 9:39 am
Pitiful_Anonymous PLATINUM, New Cumberland, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;and all you f***ers go beep beep beep in cheap,plastic cars. If It&#039;s to dumb to see or say you&#039;ll still sing it, and I&#039;ll just cue the applause&quot; - Marilyn Manson

I really like this poem as well. It's only flaw for me is a little bit too much use of the old time language. I mean it takes talent for new writers to write that way, but i think maybe sometimes if you use it too much, people get kind of confused, and that's what happened to me when I read this.

 

But, like I said, It's a very good poem, and your a talented individual.


on Apr. 11 2012 at 6:37 pm
eternal_sunshine SILVER, Minnetonka, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
Laugh, and the world laughs with you;<br /> Weep, and you weep alone.<br /> For the sad old earth must borrow it&#039;s mirth,<br /> But has trouble enough of its own.

This is beautiful. I really related to it, and I think many teens are held back by fear. Nice job approaching a common issue in a unique way. I felt your passion, and the poem flowed well. Lovely job