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The slap of life

January 28, 2012
By KatsK DIAMOND, Saint Paul, Minnesota
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Being inexhaustible, life and nature are a constant stimulus for a creative mind.<br /> ~Hans Hofmann<br /> You must stay drunk on writing so reality cannot destroy you.<br /> ~Ray Bradbury

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In the brightly-lit house
I walk through the halls
She is here
where we still laugh and wish
but there is a wall

This is not mine to have,
the delicious fragility of this travesty
is tinged with sorrow
bitterness and regret now

On life's present
I tie the ribbon in a foolish way
we crashed together
then drifted apart, barely united
I walk away

The author's comments:
I have been feeling more like an outsider, and contemplative now. A friendship with a friend who I've been close to all of my lives is slowly unraveling. This encounter has not yet happened, but I fear that it will soon. I want to tell her, but I still want to preserve our somewhat-intact friendship.
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Mr.packerbear12 SILVER said...
on Feb. 20 2014 at 4:07 pm
Mr.packerbear12 SILVER, Minnesota Lake, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Judge lest not you be judged&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Take the plank out of your own eye before the speck out of your brother&#039;s&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;live each day as if it&#039;s your last&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;God doesn&#039;t give you what you can handle, He helps you handle what you are given&quot;

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I thought that this was a pretty well written poem, had good imagery as well. This reminded me of the poem "Mending Wall" by Robert Frost.
KatsK DIAMOND said...
on Jul. 7 2012 at 7:23 pm
KatsK DIAMOND, Saint Paul, Minnesota
57 articles 0 photos 301 comments

Favorite Quote:
Being inexhaustible, life and nature are a constant stimulus for a creative mind.<br /> ~Hans Hofmann<br /> You must stay drunk on writing so reality cannot destroy you.<br /> ~Ray Bradbury

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Thanks! Somehow, whenever I get the email that someone commented, I always have a secret, somewhat irrational fear that it's going to be horrible (thankfully, most of the time it isn't). I used a writing prompt for this, but the feelings and setup are my own. Obviously, as this year we're going to high school, we'll just remain awkward friends-I'm sure I'll be a third wheel often. At least I have stuff to look forward to, right?
CraftyCinamatic SILVER said...
on Jul. 7 2012 at 6:48 pm
CraftyCinamatic SILVER, Ponte Vedra, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Fall in love? I&#039;d rather fall in chocolate&quot; <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> - Me :D

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I love your wording in this. There is so much emotion, I almost thought this was about death before reading the comment. I can relate to this feeling of losing people in your life.
Good work, keep it up :>