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Criticism
July 14, 2013
Your writing is choppy,
It lacks a good flow.
Your rhyming is useless;
It's pointless you know.
Your stanzas are long,
And grammatically incorrect.
Your plot is so boring,
I can't stay erect.
You can't count your syllables,
Haikus are a chore.
Your characters are adolescent.
Don't give me anymore!
Though... your story was okay.
I mean, all in all.
Your stanzas were descriptive,
And left me in awe.
Your writing kind of represents,
the vast and stormy seas.
And poems don't necessarily,
have to rhyme with ease.
Adolescent characters,
They're everywhere I look.
And maybe, just maybe,
Yours would make a good book.
© Michael H., Mildford, CT
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This article has 46 comments.
Superhero_Fan SILVER said...
on Aug. 27 2013 at 9:34 am
Thank you!
rand0mteenager SILVER said...
on Aug. 27 2013 at 2:36 am
I love your poem, it flows greatly and it shows both sides of criticism <3
Superhero_Fan SILVER said...
on Aug. 18 2013 at 3:11 pm
Thanks Plume!
Superhero_Fan SILVER said...
on Aug. 18 2013 at 3:11 pm
Thanks!
OldYoungOne said...
on Aug. 16 2013 at 9:52 am
Somehow I feel like this was directed at me lol because I honestly give some heart breaking critiques. But that aside i likw how the poem spins the reasons why someone doesn't like a poem into reason why somone would love it just as much. Not much depth but it works. Good job.
Superhero_Fan SILVER said...
on Aug. 15 2013 at 4:47 pm
Thanks Jade! I appreciate thae five stars. :p
Superhero_Fan SILVER said...
on Aug. 14 2013 at 10:29 pm
Thanks Tori! I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for reading it.
Superhero_Fan SILVER said...
on Aug. 10 2013 at 2:05 pm
Thank you, twice! ;) I'm very glad you liked it, and I'm also really glad you haven't seen it anywhere else! That would make me a plagerizer (I'm not sure I spelled that right). Well, thanks for commenting!
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 9 2013 at 6:03 pm
I really do like the idea behind this poem. :) It is interesting, and I honestly can't think of any time I have seen it done before. The ending was quite unexpected, but in the best way! I really enjoyed your optimism. :) Often, I want to write myself off as nothing but an amateur, so it was really nice to read something about the positive side of teen writers. ^.^ Great work! I really do like the idea behind this poem. :) It is interesting, and I honestly can't think of any time I have seen it done before. The ending was quite unexpected, but in the best way! I really enjoyed your optimism. :) Often, I want to write myself off as nothing but an amateur, so it was really nice to read something about the positive side of teen writers. ^.^ Great work!
Superhero_Fan SILVER said...
on Aug. 6 2013 at 8:30 pm
Thank you Sam! I appreciate that.
CatchAFallingStar PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 6 2013 at 2:36 pm
I love this poem because of your word choice and the way you made it flow so nicely. Really well written and I love the metaphor you used, "Your writing kind of represents, the vast stormy seas." I'm giving this five stars :)
Superhero_Fan SILVER said...
on Aug. 5 2013 at 8:31 pm
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!
MissExploration BRONZE said...
on Aug. 5 2013 at 8:28 pm
I love it! 5 stars! Very creative! I like how you change the tone throughout your poem.
Superhero_Fan SILVER said...
on Aug. 5 2013 at 8:17 pm
Thank you, Hanban! I'm flattered that you liked it!
This is an amazing poem that flows perfectly and describes criticism perfectly. One may first find all of the negatives of a poem or story before they find the undeniable positives. This poem shows how even the most pointless works of writing can be looked at through deeper eyes and can be found quite beautiful. Thank you so much for writing this; you really have a talent!
Superhero_Fan SILVER said...
on Aug. 3 2013 at 7:47 pm
Thank you, Amaranthinium! (Wow that's a mouthful!) I'm glad you liked my poem! Thank you for reading it!
Superhero_Fan SILVER said...
on Aug. 3 2013 at 7:39 pm
Thank you McKay! *bows dramatically* I'm glad you liked it and thought it was creative! I appreciate you taking the time to read it!
